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Greg Daniels
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because Daniels is a very great comedy writer and has worked and created several classic series. I think he has earned a good article

Thanks, NoD&#39;ohnuts (talk) 03:03, 27 December 2011 (UTC)NoD'ohnuts

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this article, here are some suggestions for improvement - I assume your goal is WP:GA since you think "he has earned a good article". I think it looks pretty good Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 19:55, 11 January 2012 (UTC)
 * A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are several FAs at Featured_articles which might be useful models.
 * Avoid WP:OVERLINKing - The Simpsons is linked twice in one paragraph in the lead, for example.
 * Also avoid vague time terms like currently (as they can quickly become out of date). It is better to use phrases like "as of YEAR" - see for example ''He is currently working on both those shows and is developing two animated series ...
 * Any chance of getting a free image of him?
 * In the Life and Career section, I would add years wherever possible - when did he attend (or at least graduate from) Phillips Exeter or Harvard?
 * Or when he did he start at Not Necessarily the News, or SNL?
 * Writing is OK, but could be tightened - one example ''He was hired in the fifth season following the departures of many of the original writers from the previous season.
 * Articles on people associated with TV and movies almost always list their work at the end of the article - not in the middle
 * Also the whole Credits section needs references
 * IN Awards I would list all his nominations, not just his wins (and give the years)
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)