Wikipedia:Peer review/Hartford Dark Blues all-time roster/archive1

Hartford Dark Blues all-time roster
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would would like to take this to the FL level, so any help with grammar and prose would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks,  Neonblak talk  -  06:34, 3 December 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Since I just peer reviewed Providence Grays all-time roster a few hours ago, I thought that I would look at this too. I imagine some of my comments will be similar, but I was a bit surprised that the two articles had some differences where I thought they would be more similar. Here are some suggestions for improvement. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 21:56, 10 December 2009 (UTC)
 * I also did a minor copyedit of the lead but not of the table text. Please revert if I made mistakes or introduced errors.
 * Not sure what this is supposed to mean - missing word? With a stable hitting [something?], behind veterans Tom Carey, Tom York, Dick Higham, and Jack Burdock, the franchise enjoyed two second place finishes in 1875 and 1876.[1][10][11] or just omit the first "a"? With stable hitting, behind veterans... The "two" is not needed in any case.
 * First off, while I realize the teams had very different histories, I think the basics of their articles should be as close to similar as possible. I noticed that the colors for the key are different here - I would make them consistent.
 * I also think that if the Grays has a History section, this should too (although the lead here is shorter and meets the four paragraphs maximum of WP:LEAD
 * I think the fact that they played one year of only four they existed should be in the first sentence, and some indication of the time period should be in there as well. Perhaps something like The Hartford Dark Blues was a short-lived Major League Baseball franchise in the 1870s, which was based for three years in Hartford, Connecticut and one in Brooklyn, New York.
 * Number consistency in the list descriptions is also an issue here - there are places where small numbers are spelled out (played one game) and others where the digits are used. Do whatever is required by FLC / Baseball WikiProject, but be consistent
 * As in the other article, the Alt text tool shows no alt text - this will be needed per WP:ALT
 * I did not copyedit the list descriptions. They read a little better than the Grays did, but here are a few things to watch for (in addition to overuse of and).
 * Some places it is not clear if a statistic applies to one season or to the player's whole career Barnie's first was also the only season he played more than 19 games, and had a .138 batting average. This is also a bit awkward and could perhaps be something like Barnie had a .138 batting average in 1874, his first season and the only one in which he played more than 19 games. (I know I said not to repeat the year before, but I think this makes it clearer)
 * I am not sure what this means Larkin pitched one season with the Dark Blues, and had a win–loss record of 29-25 in center field during his only game for the 1875 Hartford team. I think maybe this was two sentences that got combined by accident (period after win-loss record, then missing something?)
 * Again, great suggestions. After the Grays' review, I suspected that this one would produce very similar results. Neonblak talk  -  22:34, 10 December 2009 (UTC)