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Heather Chasen
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because from this peer review I am hoping to be able to cleanup the article to a high standard, aswell as being able to further nominate for FA. I would also like to confirm whether the article is at the standard I think it is. Thanks, Mayhem  Mario  16:44, 13 March 2012 (UTC)

Comments ✅ all — M.Mario  (T/C) 14:31, 31 July 2012 (UTC) The Rambling Man (talk) 19:45, 2 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Lead could be a bit longer, maybe two paras.
 * What precisely cites her birth date?
 * Don't link common terms link England.
 * Don't over link terms like soap opera.
 * " She was in the..." "was in" reads clumsily to me, appeared in?
 * "(who had pulled out of the role for personal reasons)" not really necessary in the lead.
 * Explain what RADA means before you just use the abbreviation.
 * Regents Park is actually Regent's Park.
 * "Chasen had a relationship with Amanda Barrie although has never spoken about this" if you believe this to be true and cites back it up then consider LGBT cats.
 * No need to link London.
 * " received nice fan mail" reads a little weakly to me.
 * "and Norman Simmonds " ->" and Norman Simmonds'"
 * " for the 14th June episode" remove "th" from 14th.
 * "other TV programmes" -> television
 * Z Cars is Z-Cars.
 * What is "the BAC"?
 * "was nominated for the Tony Award " when?
 * 1 Episode -> 1 episode (etc)
 * Make sure data tables comply with MOS:DTT for col and row scopes to enable screen readers to make the most of these lists.
 * 1959–77 vs 1966–1968 be consistent with date range formats.
 * Ref 19, what does " 32. 30-5 August 2011." mean?
 * Is it BBC or BBC?
 * Ref 5- "Retrieved 25June 2011." space needed.
 * Ref 5- it's The Daily Telegraph.