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Helen Gandy
Helen Gandy was J. Edgar Hoover's secretary for 54 years. This article, proposed for deletion in February, has been completely overhauled. It is now longer than Hoover's entry and includes a thorough bibliography. PedanticallySpeaking 18:30, Apr 1, 2005 (UTC)
 * Is it possible to get a picture somewhere? I think that's pretty important. More background info is necessary too, in my opinion.  Anything about her parent's occupations?  I realize there probably isn't too much info out there on this, but more would certainly be helpful.  The latter parts look very well researched and are quite informative.  The lead could be lengthened to include more info on the files and her role in their destruction, and perhaps a phrase or two about her background (birth, education, etc.). Finally, to me it looks a bit clumsy to talk about her death and then jump back to the section on the files, but I'm not sure how it could be improved.  I may be wrong, but does anyone have suggestions for that part? Spangineer &#8734; 22:15, Apr 2, 2005 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your favorable comments. I put a bit of background and more about the files in the lead.  Theoharis's FBI Companion gave her parents' names but nothing more.  I'd like to have a photo, but I don't have one.  I'm out of chronological sequence by putting the files last, but putting her death last would mean there was an orphaned graf by itself at the end and the way it is now the last bit of the files section has a nice bit of finality to the article.  PedanticallySpeaking 16:12, 5 Apr 2005 (UTC)