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Helicopter prison escapes

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2009.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring it up to GA status

Thanks, Esemono (talk) 08:16, 6 May 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: What a great idea for an article, here are some suggestions for improvement. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 04:28, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
 * I would convert this to a list (table) with columns for the date, prison, location, country, and notes. I doubt this would be eligible for WP:GA as it is pretty list-y already (and lists are not eligible for GA), so why not make it a full sortable list and go for WP:FL? Perhaps there could also be a column for number of escapees (zero if unsuccessful)
 * The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and needs to be expanded. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
 * The article may need fewer sections / headers too (converting to a list / table would fix this). Please see WP:LEAD
 * Ref 29 is IMDB which is not usually seen as a WP:RS. Plus it as an internet ref needs URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * July 2005 needs a ref and more details.
 * Article needs a copyedit - language is rough in spots.