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Henderson Village
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like more opinions on how to improve it. Thanks, - Diligent Terrier  (and friends) 18:55, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
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Finetooth comments:


 * The article is just a stub so far. I think can think of several ways to make it more complete and more interesting. You might tell us, for example, more about where exactly this is in Georgia (middle, south, north, coast), how many miles it is to something big and well-known like Atlanta, and what highway or highways are nearby. Give us some dimensions; how many acres does the resort occupy? What's the weather like at the resort? Days of sunshine, amount of rain? What kinds of vegetation and wildlife might a visitor see? What sorts of homes? How big are the cottages? Who goes there? Is it always full? Is it notably different from other resorts? What's special about it?


 * You want to make sure that this is an encyclopedia article and not an ad for the resort. It would be good to find more sources of information about the place in addition to Henderson.com. Newspaper articles might be one possibility. If no sources exist, the article may not qualify as encyclopedic.


 * The web citations should include author, title, date of publication, URL, and access date if these are known. The citation templates at WP:CIT can be helpful in remembering what data to try to include and where to put it.


 * It's not clear to me whether the hunting grounds, Wimberly Event Center, and rose garden are on the resort land or outside of it. You should clarify this and give more details about those places if they are important.


 * The "rose garden" link goes to a disambiguation page, which doesn't explain "rose garden". In any case, rose garden doesn't need to be linked since most readers will already know what the term means.


 * The hotel infobox has a place for an image, and it would be good to include one if you or a friend have a digital camera and can take a suitable photo, upload it, and license it for use in Wikipedia.

I hope you find these comments helpful. If you have questions, please ask. Finetooth (talk) 00:19, 6 July 2008 (UTC)

Doncram comments: Hope this helps. doncram (talk) 17:10, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
 * A wording problem is the use of conjunction "it's" (short for "it is") when possessive "its" is meant.
 * It is phrased that the resort, or some part of it, is "remembered for" its listing in the 2004 Silver Spoon. I find that a little awkward, and doubt that there are many people who actually know of and remember those 2004 awards.  Wouldn't it be more natural to say something about the resort was "recognized" by the Silver Spoon award, or just say the resort received the award?