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Henry Fownes Luttrell
This peer review discussion has been closed. I have put this up for peer review because I am hoping to take it to GA standard and I would like feedback about improving the article.

Many thanks, Noswall59 (talk) 10:35, 11 September 2014 (UTC)

Comments from Rod This is an interesting article. A few comments: Hope these are helpful.&mdash; Rod talk 19:06, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
 * The lead seems to have quite a lot of detail, particularly about his parliamentary career, some of which could be moved to the section "Member of Parliament", with more of a summary left in the lead.
 * I've had a go at shortening the intro and making it more of a summary... let me know if it needs any more tweaks.
 * I would be interested in more on his development of Dunster Castle (including early use of wallpaper!) and construction of Conygar Tower.
 * I've also done some research on the contributions he made to Dunster Castle and the grounds; I can see that you have done a lot of work on Dunster Castle's article, so perhaps you could let me know if I've addressed the matter properly, and if I've omitted anything. I don't have the Garnett book to hand and so I've used your citations to support three of my points (about the park, the Rococo style and the wallpaper).
 * If you want to go to GA it is often suggested that bulletted lists (eg the family) are turned into prose.
 * I have turned most of it into prose - a lot of their children died as infants or when young, so I've put that into prose form; the four who were individually more notable I've left as a list, because I think it makes it easier, but I could tweak it if it's still not up to standard.
 * Is there a picture of him (eg this or this of the man and his wife which presumably would be out of copyright by now), if not you could include a picture of the castle or similar.
 * I've added the images myself.&mdash; Rod talk 20:37, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
 * I Thanks for the photos - I am never sure whether we can use digital copies of old paintings
 * Thanks for the review Rod - very helpful and much appreciated. I've commented above, regards, -Noswall59 (talk) 11:23, 12 September 2014 (UTC).