Wikipedia:Peer review/Herbig-Haro object/archive1

Herbig-Haro object
I started this article and would like to see it get to featured status. It's about a quite important type of object in star formation, but it's a bit short-looking at the moment. I could put in plenty more information but am worried I'll be getting over-technical so seek opinions from others on what more this article needs. Worldtraveller 17:53, 30 September 2005 (UTC)

OK - here we go! (not reviewing on content) Take care! Ryan Norton T 19:26, 30 September 2005 (UTC)
 * 1) Caption on opening image is nonsensical and should be rewrote for the layman
 * 2) Intro needs two solid paragraphs, not 3 of mixed length :) Ryan Norton T 19:26, 30 September 2005 (UTC)
 * 3) "Discovery and history of observations" - paragraphs too short
 * 4) "Numbers and distribution"  - too short. Also, the image caption here is better than the first, but I'd consider rewording this a bit too
 * 5) "Proper motions and variability" - all paragraphs too short End paragraph too short
 * 6) "Physical conditions" - almost all paragraphs too short and a one sentence paragraph
 * 7) "Multiplicity" - too short
 * 8) "References" - I believe the MoS says that references should be bulleted, not numbered (i could be wrong on this)
 * 9) "External links" - better description - WHERE is link pointing to? The actual description itself isn't too bad!


 * Thanks very much! That's very helpful. I've worked on the caption and intro, expanded discovery and history section a bit and rearranged numbers and distribution a bit.  Multiplicity still needs work, and I will probably actually merge it into a section on the stars that drive HH objects.  I'll sort the references properly once I've added a few more.  As for external links, I'm not quite sure what you're after here?  Do you mean you want to see the actual web address as well as a description of it?
 * Thanks again - Worldtraveller 23:51, 1 October 2005 (UTC)

For the external link thing instead of just having something like
 * A catalogue of HH objects

You should describe WHERE the link goes to, like or or Ryan Norton T 04:31, 2 October 2005 (UTC)
 * A catalogue of HH objects at the University of Colorado
 * Casa.colorado.edu - 'A catalogue of HH objects'
 * University of Colorado - 'A catalogue of HH objects'


 * With apologies for a slight delay, I've now worked on addressing the various comments. Multiplicity has now been converted into a larger section on the source stars.  Does the article make sense to the layman?  Is it coherent and is it at all interesting?  Thanks! Worldtraveller 11:48, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

I revised my things above - the intro is quite good (structure-wise) so the two vs. three paragraph thing probably isn't too bad here. Anyway, I did read this and it's fairly interesting but I have to click a whole bunch of wikilinks (nebula, interstellar medium) to find out what's going on. Maybe for the layman give a quickie in parenthases for terms like that. Otherwise, it looks good sans a short paragraph at the end there in "Proper motions and variability". Ryan Norton T 15:17, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

One more thing - "Characteristics" may want an intro. Pretty minor though in the scheme of things and it would probably be a quick two-sentence intro. Ryan Norton T 15:30, 5 October 2005 (UTC)


 * I'm not so sure I can really make that short paragraph any longer without unnecessary padding. Will have a think about that.  Have altered the structure to remove the need for a characteristics intro (i think), and make the TOC look nicer as well.  Altered the text to make the meaning of nebula and interstellar medium clearer, hopefully - just let me know any other terms that need explaining and I'll add that.  Thanks! Worldtraveller 15:49, 5 October 2005 (UTC)