Wikipedia:Peer review/History of the Grand Canyon area/archive1

History of the Grand Canyon area
I've already used a few different references for this and think it is getting close to FA quality. But I'd like to see what others think still needs to be done. --mav 22:33, 17 Apr 2005 (UTC)
 * Very good overall. The huge number of redlinks leads me to believe an awful lot of those are not really worth their own article. Is every person, business, and land survey associated with this really notable? The only other problem I saw at all was the large number of fragmented, short paragraphs which makes the flow poor. Judging by your other articles' narrative arc, you know how to do that well, so please do. - Taxman 18:58, Apr 20, 2005 (UTC)
 * I'll work on the prose and admit this article has not gone through a final copyedit. See below about the red links. --mav 12:06, 21 Apr 2005 (UTC)
 * I agree with the above comments regarding the high # of redlinks (fixing typos and wikilinks corrected some of this) and fragmented paragraphs. I'd suggest considering removing links for items such as the Powell Expeditions or making some sort of reasonable tie to an existing article, unless you plan on writing new articles for these!  There's also a bit of overlap with info on the existing Grand Canyon page, you might want to link or combine this...-Pkuchinski 04:05, 21 Apr 2005 (UTC)
 * The history section at Grand Canyon will be replaced by a summary of the history of... article once that article reaches a more or less finished state. The Powell Expeditions and many of the people associated with the Grand Canyon's history are very much so important enough to have articles on Wikipedia; the current lack of such articles is a reflection of our poor coverage in this area of history, not due to the encyclopedic merit of the topics. I'd therefore prefer for most of those terms to remain linked. Not advertising our lack of coverage in those areas will not encourage those areas to be filled. For example, almost every link in the element boxes, such as the one at hydrogen, were red links when I first created the standard WikiProject Elements table in 2002. It took about 6 months for most of those red links to be filled. --mav 12:06, 21 Apr 2005 (UTC)

Copyedit done. For now I've reduced the red link load - at least until the more important items (like the Powell Expeditions and the Fred Harvey Company) get filled. --mav 01:35, 23 Apr 2005 (UTC)

The article looks really great, two small things, a picture of the Grand Canyon in the lead would be good (something like the William H. Holmes lithograph or something else from the Library of Congress), it'd make it easier on the eye, and you really should include a link to your other excellent article Geology of the Grand Canyon area somwhere in the lead. --nixie 05:38, 3 May 2005 (UTC)


 * Great ideas! I'll do that. :) --mav 17:15, 3 May 2005 (UTC)
 * Done. --mav 02:11, 11 May 2005 (UTC)