Wikipedia:Peer review/History of the Internet/archive3

History of the Internet
This article has been incrementaly improved since it was re-written last december. It currently has Good Article status, but has so far not yet passed featured article review. --Barberio 19:10, 2 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Some comments:
 * You have quite a lot of terms which are acronyms, but a lot of the time you don't clarify what the acronyms are so the reader has to click on the wikilink to find out.  Have a look at WP:MOS for what the general style for this is.  A lot of the time you do this, but some still left over, for example: DARPA, ICANN, CTSS, SDC, a whole bunch more.
 * The quote by Robert W. Taylor should probably be in the quote template. see below
 * Perhaps DNS deserves more mention in the article. Right now there is a singular mention of DNS and it's not even wikilinked.
 * (Correct me here if I got my terms crossed) I am slightly confused about the Recent trends section. It seems its more about WWW than the Internet itself.  And as long as you're mentioning things like Peer-to-peer, Flickr and Wikipedia, you should really be also mentioning - online shopping, security, child pornography, censorship, etc.--Konstable 11:18, 3 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Side issue: Please note that the quote template, until a few minutes ago (when I did an AWB-assisted mass update), has been used to link to Wikiquote, not, as Konstable seems to think, to format quoted text. Since this is a common misunderstanding, and since this template's original purpose has been supplanted by wikiquote, I have cleared the way for this other use by fixing all the old articles. ~ Jeff Q (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Ah indeed, that's not what I meant then. Well there are some templates used for quoting, and I think this quote could use one, as it is it seems to blend in with the text and just look a bit weird.  Ah here they are Category:Quotation templates. --Konstable 11:45, 5 September 2006 (UTC)


 * The article is still alphabet soup to my eyes and not yet ready for an elevation in status. I started reading it and as soon as I reached an unexplained acronym (ARPA), and this was even in a section heading, I began to switch off. Even allowing for this, many other terms are stated without any concession to non-technical readers eg packet switching.  Why did it need packet switching to work? What is a logical network? Each section needs a simple introductory sentence such as: "The first networks that were accessible to the public were created in 1978 using technology known as X.25".  JMcC 09:40, 5 September 2006 (UTC)