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Holy Wood (In the Shadow of the Valley of Death)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I hope to see this as a featured article on the main page at some point. I believe a peer review is necessary before it can be nominated. Also, I would like to verify the definitiveness of the article I wrote.

Thanks, Red marquis (talk) 21:19, 13 November 2010 (UTC)

Comments from
 * You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
 * You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, and my first suggestion would be to get your references into order. A number of your website references lack publisher and/or last access dates, which are the bare minimum needed for WP:V.
 * What makes the following reliable, high quality, sources?
 * http://www.metroactive.com/papers/metro/12.14.00/cover/manson-0050.html
 * http://www.nyrock.com/interviews/2000/mm3_int.htm
 * http://www.mansonwiki.com/wiki/IS_ADULT_ENTERTAINMENT_KILLING_OUR_CHILDREN%3F_OR_IS_KILLING_OUR_CHILDREN_ENTERTAINING_ADULTS%3F
 * http://www.alternet.org/media/11052?page=2
 * http://scandalist.thefablife.com/2008-08-04/47-marilyn-manson/
 * http://www.allaboutpopularissues.org/marilyn-manson-columbine-faq.htm
 * http://industryclick.com/magazinearticle.asp?magazineid=46&releaseid=8615&magazinearticleid=122340
 * http://lyrics.wikia.com/Marilyn_Manson:Lamb_Of_God - Another concern here is that the words of the lyrics are almost certainly copyrighted, so linking to a site carrying them as a copyright violation shouldn't be done.
 * http://www.mansonwiki.com/wiki/Interview:1999/07_Revelations_of_an_Alien-Messiah also a concern with linking to a copyright violation
 * http://www.beliefnet.com/Entertainment/Music/2001/05/Manson-Interview.aspx
 * http://www.beliefnet.com/Entertainment/Music/2001/05/Marilyn-Manson-Will-Quote-The-Bible.aspx
 * Per the MOS, article titles should not be in all caps, even when the original is in all Caps.
 * Using an article that's on the MansonWiki, even if it was originally published in Rolling Stone, is going to be a problem, as how do you know that the item was correctly transcribed? Also, it may be a copyright violation on the MansonWiki, which we're not allowed to link to.
 * Magazine and newspaper titles should be in italics.
 * Current refs 15 and 16 lack all formatting.
 * http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G6n5Oi4714o - concern with reliability (the snippet could have been edited) as well as linking to a copyright violation
 * Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 15:41, 15 November 2010 (UTC)