Wikipedia:Peer review/Homogenization (climate)/archive1

Homogenization (climate)
I've listed this article for peer review because I mostly wrote this page and it got a grade-C. I work on the topic and the homogenization of climate data is important in the US climate "debate". Thus I would love to make it better, but would need outside input to know what is apparently missing or unclear or badly formulated.

Thanks, VVenema (talk) 21:36, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi . Thanks for your work. I am not an expert in this area, but will offer some of my opinions. First off I feel it is more a B than a C grade article. These grades can be somewhat arbitrary so don't get too caught up on that. The lead can be improved however. It should summarise the article much the same way an abstract would. It could use some fleshing out. I also found it a little technical for me. We usually write for the widest possible audience and this can accomplished somewhat through wikilinks (i.e linking technical terms to other articles on those can keep this article focused). It can also help to start really simple and then expand further down. If you lose your audience in the first few sentences then it can be hard to get them back. Diagrams and graphs can also help if appropriate. In your article I feel this is only an issue in the lead and first section. After that it was explained really well.


 * It probably needs a few more references. In particular sentences that read a bit like an opinion. For example From the perspective of global warming, such local effects are undesirable, but to study the influence of climate on health such measurements are fine. and but parallel measurements are unfortunately not very often performed, if only because the reason for stopping the original measurement is not known in advance, but probably more often to save money. There are other examples as well. By not doing so you can easily cross the line to original research. The sources you do use are excellent however.


 * It is well written, the pictures look good and the topic is important. You might want to drop a note at WikiProject Environment/Climate change task force to find someone more able to help with technical aspects. AIR corn (talk) 10:36, 18 May 2017 (UTC)