Wikipedia:Peer review/Human rights in the People's Republic of China/archive1

Human rights in the People's Republic of China
I would appreciate a peer review as a preparation for submitting to GA. Thanks, ≈ jossi ≈ (talk) 11:43, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * OK, there's a wealth of information here, but I noticed some problems of balance.
 * The introduction should better summarize the article, and shouldn't include information that isn't discussed in more detail further down; I'm referring particularly to the line about the 2004 constitutional amendment.
 * There doesn't seem to be much historical perspective in the article about past human rights issues; while the article should of course be focused on the contemporary, the context seems lacking.
 * The Perspective of the PRC government should be expanded to include a list of those rights the government claims are protected in the country.
 * The material under Protect from the United States government (What's with that name?) should be moved to a broader section on international reactions.
 * The Organ harvesting seems somewhat out of proportion as a relatively small sub-topic, especially since some of the Falun Gong claims it covers at length don't seem to be substantiated. Perhaps this would fit better in a couple of lines under Capital punishment or Other human rights issues.--Pharos 05:11, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * The Ethnic minorities focuses almost entirely on the Tibetans, and the Tibetan sub-section focuses too much on semantic debates over the word "apartheid", rather than the actual political situation in PRC treatment of Tibetans.
 * Political freedom particularly seems rather undercovered (perhaps Freedom of speech too).--Pharos 05:11, 12 September 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 00:21, 15 September 2007 (UTC)

The lead needs to be rewritten. One potential suggestion: "The government of the People's Republic of China has been widely criticized by other governments, and by human rights advocacy groups, for acting contrary to internationally recognized norms of human rights." The lead should then have a clarification of who these governments and groups are, what are their major concerns, and how has the Chinese government responded to these criticisms - in particular, its concept of economic growth as related to human rights. The article itself has enough references, but is poorly organized and needs significant editing. One topic that is entirely omitted is how differing cultural and religious traditions might have affected the different perspectives on human rights held by Chinese and Western officials. VisitorTalk 17:58, 17 September 2007 (UTC)