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Hungarian comics
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've been working on this article for a couple of years, my goal is to reach whatever quality grade the topic and my abilities make possible. Since I'm editing this page alone (apart from minor editing like copy edits and bots), outsiders' opinions and advises would be very useful. In the past few weeks I completely rewritten the "Current scene" chapter, made some major changes in referencing and made some efforts in making it compatible with style standards (ie. italics). So in short: I'd be happy to read any kind of comments. Thanks, Zoli79 (talk) 17:08, 2 June 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for working on this, one of the things I love about Wikipedia is coming across articles like this on interesting topics I have not heard of. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
 * A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are several Featured articles at Category:FA-Class Comics articles and many more at Category:GA-Class Comics articles. It seems that some of the GAs might be better model articles for this one, as they are about groups of comics. For example Horror comics in the United States, 1947–1954, Silver Age of Comic Books, LGBT themes in American mainstream comics, and LGBT themes in comics
 * The toolbox finds one disambiguation link that needs to be fixed
 * The toolbox also finds one dead external link that also needs to be fixed
 * The lead is too short and needs to be expanded to better follow WP:LEAD. The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. As such, nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself
 * For ideas on expanding the lead, my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
 * The section headers need to follow WP:HEAD better. On Wikipedia headers are usually pretty concise, and do not repeat the name of the article, and subheaders do not repeat the names of higher level headers. So "Notable artists of the era" could just be "Notable artists" and "Main publications of the era" could just be "Main publications". Or under "Media" the subheader "Mainstream printed media" could just be "Mainstream print"
 * The article has a lot of WP:FAIR USE images and probably does not meet WP:NFCC - if there were articles on the artists, these could used in those.
 * Lists of names are not very informative and should instead provide context to the reader. So instead of just a list of names, a sentence or two on each of the artists or publications would be more useful to the average reader.
 * SOmep laces in the article need more references such as To attract more attention to Hungarian creations, MKSZ founded the Alfabéta prize in 2006 to award domestic authors. (The name ironically rhymes and refers to the Hungarian word analfabéta - meaning illiterate, a common offense against comics readers in the past.)
 * My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
 * Some references do not have enough information Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * Avoid vague time expressions like current - things like "As of 2011" are better*
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:40, 8 June 2011 (UTC)

Zoli79 reply: Thank you very much for your help! Your advises are very helpful. Finding a model article has been a concern for me, since there's no common policy on comics articles dealing with a whole country (and I haven't found any with a higher quality level than B). The articles you listed, might help. As for fair use, the topic really ties my hand here. Thanks again! Zoli79 (talk) 09:01, 8 June 2011 (UTC)