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Hurricane Ida (2009)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it is one of our project's A class articles and need suggestions on how to get it up to FA class. I have taken care of most of the issues from its last FA nomination, but am still in the process of correcting the rest.

Thanks, Bobby122   Contact Me   (C)  01:42, 29 September 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: I don't see anything that would cause this article much trouble at FAC. I made a fair number of minor proofing changes, but none were substantial, and I don't think I missed much. Here are a few other things I think need attention.

The tools at the top of this review page find two dead urls in citations.

Meteorological history
 * "After moving inland, the high mountains of Nicaragua caused convection associated with the hurricane to diminish, resulting in rapid weakening." - The mountains didn't move inland. Suggestion: "After the hurricane moved inland, the high mountains... ".

Central America
 * "Shortly after being designated as Tropical Storm Ida on November 4, the government of Nicaragua... ". - The government of Nicaragua wasn't designated a tropical storm. Suggestion: "Shortly after the disturbance was designated as Tropical Storm Ida on November 4, the government of Nicaragua... ".

United States
 * " were urged to not take chances and ride out the storm at home" - Tighten to "were urged to stay home"?

Nicaragua
 * "UNFPA" - This and the other abbreviations should be spelled out as well as abbreviated on first use.


 * "($2.12 million USD) - No need to link USD more than once in the main text.

Northern Caribbean
 * "In Cuba, the outer bands of Ida produced widespread heavy rainfall... " - I note some mild overlinking in the article. I don't think you need to link anything more than once in the lead and once in the main text. Cuba and Yucatan Peninsula don't need links in this section, for example.

References
 * "Lixion A. Avila and John Cangialosi" - The only places I recall seeing author names written first name first in citations is in hurricane articles. The normal order is last name first, which makes for easier alphabetizing and sorting. Normal would be "Avila, Lixion A., and Cangialosi, John". Why should hurricane articles be different?

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 04:09, 5 October 2010 (UTC)