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Hurricane Janet
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I feel that with some copy edit work, Hurricane Janet will be improved to a quality suitable for sending it to FAC. While I'd like comments on all parts of the article, specifically I'm looking for comments on the Impact section of the article.

Thanks,  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:31, 3 February 2013 (UTC)

Comments
 * A weak tropical disturbance was first reported by the airlines Air France and Iberia east of the Lesser Antilles early on September 21. needs a citation; it's not in the one given after the next sentence.
 * - It actually is – "Early on the 21st, pilot reports from the airlines Air France and Iberia indicated..." – though I added page numbers to the citation to make it more accessible.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * By September 22 the storm system had already attained winds of 60 mph (95 km/h) needs a citation, it's also not in the citation given after it.
 * - Added ref.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * As a result, the hurricane became disorganized, with winds weakening to 90 mph (145 km/h) by 1200 UTC on September 23. needs a citation.
 * - Added 'best track' ref.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * What does it mean for hurricane winds to become 'disorganized'? Is there a relevant wikilink that could clarify, or can you explain in the article? Does it just mean the hurricane weakened?
 * In this context when I said the hurricane became disorganized it meant that its structure lost the compact spiral characteristics seen in intense hurricanes, and instead became more of a 'mess' of thunderstorm activity. In turn a disorganizing hurricane correlates with weaker winds.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * The hurricane was estimated to have intensified to Category 5 hurricane intensity—the highest rating on the modern day Saffir–Simpson hurricane scale—at 1200 UTC on September 27, while in the western Caribbean Sea. needs a citation.
 * - See the reference in the following sentence. Its inscribed in the data. If you want an easier to read track data source, see [www.aoml.noaa.gov/hrd/hurdat/easyread-2012.html this link], but I just used the other citation since its part of a template. They both, however, relay the same information.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Janet maintained peak intensity as it passed over the Swan Islands before making landfall in extreme northern British Honduras between Corozal Town and Chetumal, Mexico. In Chetumal, a barometer indicated a minimum barometric pressure of 914 mbar (hPa; 27.00 inHg) in the eye of Janet. Although this is mentioned in reference 5, you may want to add the citation to these two sentences, as that's something that might get brought up in FAN.
 * - I assumed you meant to copy the reference in the comma to the end of this phrase.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Janet eventually made its final landfall 50 mi (80 km) north of Veracruz, Veracruz by 2200 UTC on September 29 as a Category 2 hurricane. needs a citation.
 * - Mentioned in reference 8, located a sentence ahead of it.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Everything in the preparations section could use more citations.
 * Not sure, the preparations section is based off of a few links, since there weren't many evacuations and just mostly warnings and watches. I could add sources for newspapers stating that a warning has been issued, but that would just be rehashing the same information located in reference 8.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * As a small but rapidly intensifying hurricane, Janet passed just south of Barbados on September 22, becoming the first hurricane to strike the island in 57 years, since the 1898 Windward Islands Hurricane. needs a citation.
 * - See reference 5, though it might be some OR since it doesn't exactly point out the 1898 hurricane, but it does state the 57 years back from 1955.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Upon penetration of the hurricane's eyewall with an altitude of 700 mi (1,100 km), a final transmission was received from the reconnaissance flight before it presumably crashed in the Caribbean Sea. Doesn't need a citation, per say, but you might want to throw one on there.
 * - Re-added the reference ahead of it.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Is there more information available on the storm's impact on the Yucatan?
 * - Well Quintana Roo and Belize sections are part of it, but other than that information relayed from there was not as much.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 *  Chetumal, Mexico was devastated, with only four buildings left standing. Storm surge pushed water to a depth of 6.5 feet (2 m), 1600 ft (490 m) inland, despite the peninsula protecting the city from the open ocean. needs citations.
 * - See reference 8.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * The first paragraph of the British Honduras section needs more references.
 * Not sure if there are any more references for that kind of general analysis of damage, but will see if there are any.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * The government also declared a state of emergency for Corozal, Orange Walk, and Belize administrative districts, including a ban on liquor sales. needs a citation, and also why did they ban liquor? To keep the population working at reconstruction? Religious reasons?
 * - Not sure if reference 40 is too far ahead of it, but it does source that. For the liquor ban, no reason was specified.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Per the automatic peer reviewer, you need to use non-breaking spaces between numbers and their units of measurement, and you shouldn't use th in dates.
 * - Not sure where the measurements without non-breaking spaces were, but just in case I replaced all convert templates with raw input. As for the 'th' it has identified a 'th' in a citation.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Reference number 1 (What is a super-typhoon?), and the reference to barbadosadvocate, need more complete references.
 * - Redid references.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * References 5, 8, and 54 need format=PDF.
 * - Added attribute.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:32, 18 February 2013 (UTC)

That's all I noticed for now. -- T K K  bark !  13:22, 18 February 2013 (UTC)