Wikipedia:Peer review/I Luv Halloween/archive1

I Luv Halloween
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know how it can be improved. Thanks, Kaguya-chan (talk) 18:08, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

Crimsonfox's Comments


 * The article needs a lot of expansion first of all so sorry if don't make too many comments, the article is quite small still.
 * The plot section currently only really talks about the characters, this can be expanded into the story and then split into two sections if there is enough information.
 * Development is made up mostly of quotes. Cut them down and point out the most significant parts of the quotes that can't be adequately explained without them
 * The volume list, from what I know, shouldn't really have a place in articles. The paragraphs in it could be tweaked a little and put into a story section

Hope that helps.  Cr im so nF ox  talk 12:09, 28 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your helpful comments. Kaguya-chan (talk) 21:16, 29 January 2010 (UTC)