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I Never Liked You
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One of my favourite books, I'm aiming at making a Featured Article out of this, and would appreciate any feedback I can get.

Thanks, Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 02:21, 27 October 2014 (UTC)**

Not much to contribute. That's all from me.  Tim riley  talk    13:49, 27 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Comments from Tim riley
 * A couple of phrases need attention:
 * she tries to spend to with him
 * she tries to talk about awkward subject
 * and this was new to me and looks strange:
 * hid-and-side games
 * Background
 * The first three sentences all begin "Brown"
 * Publication
 * A "New Definitive Edition"… the second occurrence of "Brown" in this sentence would be better as "he".
 * Reception and legacy
 * Something odd has happened to the possessive apostrophe in the first sentence of the second paragraph.
 * Thanks! These should be all fixed now. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 20:34, 27 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "Hide and side"? not "Hide and seek"?  Tim riley  talk    00:25, 28 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Aargh! Fixed. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 02:49, 28 October 2014 (UTC)