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If I Were a Boy
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to take it to nominate it for FA soon. I want someone who is familiar with the requirements of an FA to review this article. Help me fix maximum errors and improve the prose. Be as harsh as you want with the comments you will leave for all I want is to make this an FA.

Thanks, Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 12:21, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

Comment: First, why has this been classified as a list? It looks like an artixle to me. Secondly, it should not be brought to peer review while it still has an Underconstruction banner in place. If the construction has finished, the banner should be removed. Brianboulton (talk) 00:20, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * That's what I have always been doing. I see no music category for PR. And that banner will be removed soon. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 17:40, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * It goes in Arts Jivesh. — WP: PENGUIN  · [ TALK ]  17:41, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Am I supposed to change it? Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 17:45, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * I think you are supposed to move it manually at WP:PR and then change the category of this PR page to Category:Arts peer reviews. — WP: PENGUIN  · [ TALK ]  17:57, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * I cannot do it right now. I have to go. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 18:04, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * I changed the "topic" to "=arts", the bot will do the rest. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:48, 22 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 05:19, 22 December 2011 (UTC)

Comment there's a banner saying this is being overhauled by The Guild, suggest this peer review is removed until the copyedit is complete. People could be reviewing material that is being changed while we speak. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:02, 22 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Will you comment of the PR if I tell to copy-editor to stop the copy-edit? Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 11:10, 22 December 2011 (UTC)
 * It's okay, it appears that the template has been removed, I assume the article is now stable? The Rambling Man (talk) 22:38, 26 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes, it is. :)) Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 05:57, 27 December 2011 (UTC)

I feel bad that this has gone so long without a review, and so am doing a light copyedit - I have worked on the Writing and production and Controversy sections already. I will make comments on things I do not understand or have trouble with in the copyedit. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:40, 31 January 2012 (UTC)

doing Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 05:17, 29 January 2012 (UTC)


 * This seems out of place in the first paragraph of "Composition and lyrical interpretation" - everything else in the paragraph is factual, but this is pretty much opinion: With unwavering sentiments, she delivers a tormented performance. I would keep it, but move it elsewhere. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 12:13, 1 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Vocals and emotions form part of the composition analysis. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 12:15, 1 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I attributed it to critics Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 05:09, 6 February 2012 (UTC)


 * Does the Spanish name really need to be repeated twice in a few sentences? ''A Spanish version of the song, titled "Si Yo Fuera un Chico", was translated by Rudy Pérez, and mixed by Andrés Bermúdez at The Beach House in Miami.[47] It was included on the version of the album sold on the iTunes Stores of Mexico and Spain,[48] where it was marketed as "Si Yo Fuera un Chico (If I Were a Boy)", and released as a stand-alone single on February 3, 2009.[49]
 * I am surprised the criticism of the song from the Onion AV Club is not mentioned in the Critical reception section - it is used a a ref earlier in the article. See here Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 05:09, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Actually, I found this source less than a month ago. I still haven't made maximum use of it. I will add it. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 05:21, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Can you please suggest how I can use it? The author seems to have written it in riddles (at least to me). Lol. Jivesh 1205 (Talk)
 * I added something to the Reception section just now. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:30, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:02, 10 February 2012 (UTC)

This is the oldest open PR by far - if I have more comments I will add them to the article talk page (and will do more copyedits). Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:30, 10 February 2012 (UTC)