Wikipedia:Peer review/Ina Garten/archive1

Ina Garten
If anyone would like to help, I'd like some outside feedback and improvement tips on this article. I'd like for it to eventually meet feature article quality and would appreciate any input given, particularly in the Barefoot Contessa and Media and personal life sections. Thank you! Air.dance 00:13, 18 March 2006 (UTC) Thanks, AndyZ 01:42, 18 March 2006 (UTC)
 * I would suggest increasing the lead to two paragraphs (even though not required). The second sentence of the article contains weasel words- Renowned for demystifying fine cuisine with an emphasis on quality ingredients and timesaving tips, Garten is considered a top authority on cooking and home entertaining. By whom is she considered so?
 * The quote under Politics and opinions needs a citation, perhaps you might want to consider using the Cite.php footnote method. Note that according to WP:WIAFA, inline citations are required. Also, the sentences under Barefoot Contessa cookbook need citation(s).
 * According to Make only links relevant to the context, only links with full dates (not just years alone) should be linked.
 * Okay, I think I've taken care of all of that. Great suggestions, and thanks so much for your help!  Air.dance 02:00, 18 March 2006 (UTC)

Wow, this article has really come along! Ever since the chefography aired i've been meaning to come back and add stuff but it seems I've been beaten to the punch and then some. I've made a few little wording edits. The second paragraph of the cookbook section needs some work. The punctuation of that first sentence is all over the place. Some of the paragraph still seems a bit POV (calling the price steep for example). There is no reference to detractors, and the only reference to supporters is her Food Network lead-in, Giada DeLaurentiis. I would imagine she's not the most unbiased source. Finally, a personal peeve: the use of the word "notably." If it's not notable, why is it in an encyclopedia? Bgruber 21:40, 24 March 2006 (UTC)
 * I agree that the punctuation for the first sentence is messy and will reformat that.
 * As for the bias of the De Laurentiis quote, well.. yes and no. I see what you mean in that she's a fellow FN star, but she did single Garten out from the other fifty or so people on that channel.  I think it stands okay as-is, but if I find another reference that's less biased, I'll definitely replace it.
 * Will also look for criticism in-print, though I'll probably come up short on acceptable sources. What do you think about saying "comparatively steep MSRP" -- that would be verifiable by simple searching any bookstore and comparing prices.
 * Haha, yeah, I know. I'll take a look at my use of notably and see if there isn't something more suitable.
 * Thanks so much for your help, these are great suggestions! Air.dance 23:25, 24 March 2006 (UTC)