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Interstate 70 in West Virginia
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I am looking for some feedback on the article before I send it to FAC. The article has previously passed GA, and USRD A-Class Review, and has been copyedited by the GoCE, but I want to make sure I have my ducks in a row first. f

Thanks,  Admr Boltz  19:10, 10 February 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: thanks for your work on this article - I have been on this highway and here are some suggestions for improvement.
 * I would include the length in the lead and perhaps the fact that it is the shortest section of 1-70 in any one state.
 * Whoops, usually do that. --  Admr  Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * The most difficult criterion for most articles to pass at WP:FAC is 1a, a professional level of English. There are several reviewers at FAC who do not like verb + ing constructions. Just in the lead there are "linking", "traveling", "crossing", "entering", and "exiting"
 * None of the uses seem to violate User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing, however I have attempted to remove some of them. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Despite the fact that I have been on this highway, it took me a while to figure out the direction the course description ion the lead (and in Route description too). I would say explicilty that it enters from Ohio in the west and exits to Pennsylvania in the east. See WP:PCR
 * All WP:USRD articles are written west to east and south to north per WP:USRD/STDS and has been generally accepted at FAC with out further explination. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * The average reader will have no idea what the USRD convention is (I did not, and I am fairly familair with Wikipedia), and unless the article tells them, average readers will not know which direction the highway is being described in. Please provide context to the reader. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 13:14, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * The last paragraph in the Route description section is not a route description - it is about usage. Might want to call the section "Route description and use" or move this paragraph to the newly re-named "History and use" section
 * Other USRD FA's have been passed with the title as is. The header has been set per the USRD standards as well. See I-80 Bus. for another recent FA that passed with traffic under the Route description. --  Admr  Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, if that is the convention. Might want to point this out in the FAC nom (that it follows the USRD MOS and other road article FAs as a model). Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 13:14, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * It was not clear to me when the events in the second paragraph of History were taking place
 * --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * While conciseness is good, comprehensiveness is a FA criterion - I looked at current ref 18 to see when the second paragraph of history was taking plkace and that article mentions costs (3 million just to removate on of the two tunnels) and issues with water causing tiles not to stick inside the tunnel. These may be worth including
 * Costs included. --  Admr Boltz  06:00, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Current ref 20 seems to say that the tunnel is a single lane in each direction. If this is correct, this should be made clearer in the article/
 * There is one thru-lane in each direction. They are both two lanes wide, however exits on each side of the tunnel are exit only. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Does the use of color in the Exit listing meet WP:ACCESS?
 * Yes. There is a legend, and the reason for the coloring is indicated in the notes field. Also, see MOS:RJL. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Should the Exit listing give kilometers as well as miles for distances?
 * No, see MOS:RJL. A conversion refernece is provided with LegendRJL. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't have time to comment on everything, but I had some trouble following the proxe. Just in the course section, I found this confusing: I-70 enters West Virginia by crossing the western channel of the Ohio River onto Wheeling Island. The freeway passes through a light commercial zone as U.S. Route 40 (US 40) and US 250, becoming concurrent with I-70 before crossing the Fort Henry Bridge. So it enters the state as I-70, but then it is US 40 and US 250, then becomes concurrent with I-70??? Sicne the article is about I-70, I would expect the course description to follow that highway. It is not clear to me what "the freeway" refers to in the second sentence quoted.
 * Corrected the sentence, it seems to have been changed from what I originally wrote. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * "the freeway" allways refers to I-70 as introduced in the lead, and the Interstate Highway System article. None of the other highways mentioned are part of the Interstate Highway System, more commonly known as freeways. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * I am also not clear what the Greater Wheeling Trail is - a highway? a trail? Since it is a red link, that's no help.
 * The Greater Wheeling Trail is a rail trail. I do not have enough secondary sources to make an article of it, but someone may be able to dig one up. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't WV 88 be spelled out in full on first use - As I-70 curves to the south, the highway intersects US 40 and WV 88, with the ramps ... ?
 * The abbreviation for WV Routes had been established in the first paragraph of the Route description with WV 2. Past FAs have accepted this. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Another problem sentence - Still elevated, a complex interchange with US 40 and West Virginia Route 2 (WV 2) provides access to downtown Wheeling and Benwood. Sicne the fact that the highway is elevated has not been explicitly mentioned so far in this section, it just reads oddly. The next question is what is the subject of this sentence - 1-70?? the "complex interchange"??
 * Elevated has been fixed. The whole stretch between the western channel of the Ohio River to the tunnel is elevated. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Corrected the subject. --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Canyon?? Would gorge or deep valley work better? Canyon souns like the Wild West, not West Virginia ;-)
 * Well I am in Utah, so I guess thats wild west, --  Admr  Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Or in As I-70 curves to the south, the highway intersects US 40 and WV 88, with the ramps from the eastbound lanes crossing underneath the freeway, parallel to Wheeling Creek. three highways are mentioned and I was not super sure which was the "freeway" mentioned,
 * --  Admr Boltz  05:57, 16 February 2011 (UTC)
 * As a general impression, there seems to be (if anything) almost too much detail in the Route description seciton and not enough in the History section.
 * I added some more to the history. --  Admr Boltz  02:55, 19 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 05:06, 16 February 2011 (UTC)