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Inveresk and York Park Precinct, Launceston

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review so I can receive feedback to improve the article.

Thanks,  Aaroncrick (Tassie Boy talk) 07:25, 16 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Note: Editors are restricted to one PR nomination per day. Brianboulton (talk) 23:37, 16 April 2009 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: Here are a few suggestions for improvement.

Infobox
 * More details, the coordinates for example, would be good. You could look at the Launceston, Australia infobox for ideas about what might be added.

Lead Aurora Stadium
 * "Australian Football League" should have the abbreviation on first use so that AFL by itself makes sense to readers unfamiliar with the league. Here's what I mean: Australian Football League (AFL).
 * Similarly, TAFE needs to appear on first reference as Technical and Further Education (TAFE). The sentence in which TAFE appears also needs an "and the" inserted, thus: "It is home to Aurora Stadium, the only current Australian Football League venue in Tasmania, the Queen Victoria Museum and Art Gallery, and the Technical and Further Education (TAFE) Tasmania and Academy of Arts."
 * "An Australia Technical College campus is currently under construction at the site and is expected to be opened early next year." - "Currently" and "next year" are both inherently vague. Five years from now, what will they mean? It's generally better to find a way to be specific by using phrases like "as of 2009" or "in 2010".
 * Bolding in the main text of Wikipedia articles is generally limited to the repetition of the article's subject in the first line of the lead, per WP:MOSBOLD. The bolded words in this section should probably be in normal type.
 * "It is primarily used to host Australian rules football and has a record crowd of 20,971, when Hawthorn played Richmond in an AFL match in June 2006." - A bit awkward. Suggestion: "Primarily used for Australian rules football, its record attendance was 20,971, when Hawthorn played Richmond in an AFL match in June 2006."
 * The first two paragraphs are unsourced even though much of the material is not common knowledge. A good rule of thumb is to source every paragraph, every set of statistics, every direct quote, and every claim that is unusual or that might reasonably be questioned. The "record crowd" claim, for example, is a statistic that might reasonably be questioned. It needs to be verified with an in-line citation to a verifiable and reliable source.

Upgrade plan
 * ... application to the Federal Government’s Strategic Projects Program for a new Northern Stand, after fire damaged part of the existing heritage-listed structure." - This is the first mention of the North Stand and its status as a heritage-listed structure. A bit of background would be helpful, and most readers won't know precisely what "heritage-listed" means. Either a wikilink or a brief in-text explanation would be useful.
 * Citation 3 is apparently being used to support the claim that the estimated cost of the upgrade is $4.2 million. However, the cited source doesn't mention the upgrade cost. Citation 2 links to a source that supports the cost claim. It's important to be careful that cited sources actually support the claims they are attached to.

Inversk Showrounds
 * Citation 5 supports only a small fraction of the claims made in the paragraph it is attached to.
 * "A popular feature of the show is the sideshows which feature showrides, foodstalls, games of skill, and showbag stalls." - "Feature" is singular while "sideshows" is plural. "Showbag" is a special term that needs to be linked or explained. "Showrides" is also a word I have never seen before. Does it mean carnival rides like the ferris wheel and bumping cars, or does it mean animal rides?
 * "MS fest" needs be spelled out and explained. Does MS stand for multiple sclerosis?
 * The entire second paragraph is unsourced. Please see WP:V.

Australian Technical College and Past proposed projects
 * Both sections are much too short to stand alone. The college section looks like a good candidate for expansion. It might be possible to expand the past projects section to include more details as well.

References
 * Citations should include author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and access date, if all of these can be found. Some of the existing references are less complete than they could be. For example, citation 4 might include the publisher, The Queen Victoria Museum and Art Gallery, and citation 7 should include the author, John Caples. I like using the "cite family" of templates partly because they remind me of all the categories of information that might be included if available. The templates live at WP:CIT. If you use them, don't mix the "cite" templates with other template families in the same article.
 * Newspaper names should appear in italics.

Images
 * What makes the RAIA model of the Tasmania School of Architecture "free to use" as claimed on the image description page?
 * The sources for the other images can't simply be the English-language Wikipedia. Fact-checkers need to be able to verify that source images do not have copyright restrictions that prevent their publication by Wikipedia.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 20:11, 23 April 2009 (UTC)