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J. S. Woodsworth
J. S. Woodsworth is the founding father of Canada's third largest political party. This article tells his story concisely, and, I hope, engagingly. What does it need to bring it to FA status? D e nni &#9775;  02:55, 30 November 2005 (UTC)

The lead could be expanded to 2 paragraphs, the second should mention what did in his political career. I think the childhood and early ministry sections should be merged since the childhood section is really quite short - perhaps just called early life and ministry. I think the prose could use some work, there are quite a few paragraphs begining in year x he did y. I also didn't get a good idea of what his socialist ideals were when I read the article.

I would also suggest updating the image copyright info on the first image so that it meets all the fair use requirements- since the non-commercial licence will probablt be an issue on FAC.--nixie 22:29, 30 November 2005 (UTC)


 * Thanks, nixie. I'll work on those. D e nni &#9775;  01:43, 1 December 2005 (UTC)


 * The discussion on what Wooodsworth did as leader of the CCF between 1932 and 1939 is rather thin. One minor point, maybe the ISBNs of Woodsworth's books could be supplied if they exist. Other than that, an excellent, well written article almost there as a FAC. Luigizanasi 05:35, 3 December 2005 (UTC)


 * The quotations will need references (if from books, then to specific page numbers). Can the influence from his grandfather be expanded - I didn't understand the 1837 Rebellions-grandfather-J.S.W. connection. Being in London in the 1890s is pretty big in terms of public health and social activism so this could be expanded upon. A really good book on this is Atlantic Crossings: Social politics in a progressive age ISBN 0674002016 which describes how such social politics made its way from Britain to North America (and vice versa) during the turn-of-the-century. If it mentions Woodsworth specifically then it would be very valuable for this article. I would like to see a more detailed description of his activities as an MP. Also, the NDP abandoning "Woodsworth's idealistic vision" thing should probably be more specific. Otherwise, it is a great article, well on its way to becoming a FA. --maclean25 18:20, 14 December 2005 (UTC)