Wikipedia:Peer review/Jarmann M1884/archive1

Jarmann M1884
Pretty much wrote all of this article muyself as well - same as the Krag-Petersson below - and this too is in need of some fresh eyes to bring it up a notch or two. And as with the KP, this could also need attention from someone patient enought to correct my terrible spelling ;) WegianWarrior 14:06, 29 Nov 2004 (UTC)
 * I would say the same as for Kra-Petersson. The lead section needs expanding. I just finished expanding linked list, have a look at that for an example, but any WP:FA article will do. We need some of the terminology cleared up, like what is a "bolt"? I've got no clue when it comes to guns, I'm an Australian who lives in a (relatively) peaceful part of Western Sydney. Other things: who designed it? Why was it made in the first place? Can you expand the article from info you get from other sources? I dunno how much info there would be though. - Ta bu shi da yu 12:55, 30 Dec 2004 (UTC)
 * Did my best.. could say I'm on a lag, seeing as how the article is about twice as long =)
 * A bolt btw, is one of those other names for breechblock... the piece of the firearm action that makes sure the bullet goes out the front of the gun and not the rear. I guess we gun nuts assume everyone knows stuff like this, which make it good someone can point it out for us.
 * WegianWarrior 21:55, 31 Dec 2004 (UTC)