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Jasper High School
I need help on how to eliminate all the bullets. If there is any subject that needs to be added, please help!

Evan 21:00, 1 July 2006 (UTC)Longhornsg


 * As a general approach, try putting the things in the lists into some logical groups on a bit of paper or whatever - get it down to 3 or 4 groups. So 'Awards' might go into groups like 'Sporting', 'Academic', and umm, some others. It's a long time since I was in school. I'm sure you can think of some. Then think about what is notable about the schools achievements in those groups. This should give you some ideas for how to summarise the achievements in prose, probably by saying how many 'whatevers' they have won, and then describing the most notable highlights. Like "The school's soccer team has won 15 major awards since its creation. In 1278 the school team won the FIFA World Cup, beating Mordor 5-0 on penalties in the final. Although the school's quidditch team has been less successful, alumni Harry Potter was part of the 2157 Milky Way team that narrowly lost to Andromeda in the intergalactic finals."


 * Having said that, I suspect your problem may well be finding enough notable things to write an encyclopaedia article about. Would you expect to find an article on your school in any other encyclopaedia? However, that doesn't seem to have stopped a lot of other people. You could also look at the many other school articles on Wiki for some ideas.


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Andy t 14:59, 3 July 2006 (UTC)