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Jefferson–Hemings controversy
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… it has the potential to become a Good or Featured article

Thanks, Monkelese (talk) 20:35, 4 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review) Hope that's helpful, and good luck! &mdash; Cirt (talk) 18:10, 25 October 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 2) Checklinks tool shows several problems throughout with dead links and slow links. I strongly suggest archiving as many as possible with added parameters archiveurl= and archivedate= with Internet Archive links.
 * 3) Per WP:LEAD, well, actually lede looks pretty good. Might consider adding a sentence or two to the first paragraph.
 * 4) 3 total images used in article, those will require an image review at either WP:GAN or WP:FAC, suggest you go over all those image pages and make sure all fields are filled in and all licensing checks out okay.
 * 5) A few one-sentence-long-paragraphs and other short paragraphs throughout, consider expanding and/or merging them up.
 * 6) 10 instances in article of large amounts of blockquoting. Strongly recommend removing all blockquoting. Paraphrase instead, and trim down for succinctness. If absolutely necessary, a few shorter quotations smattered about, but I'd avoid it.
 * 7) Controversy sect, entire paragraph starting with sentence The Jefferson-Wayles descendants and most historians denied for nearly 200 years that he was the father of Hemings' children.  is uncited.
 * 8) Controversy sect, entire paragraph The manuscripts for Thomas Jefferson's Farm Books were rediscovered and published for the first time in 1953, edited by Edwin M. Betts. They provided extensive data about slaves and slave births, including all of Sally Hemings' children, and have been used extensively by researchers. is uncited.
 * 9) Controversy sect, last sentence in very last paragraph of sect is uncited.
 * 10) Evidence sect, last sentence of 4th paragraph is uncited: Before their report, in the previous 180 years historians had made no suggestion that Hemings had more than one partner for her children.
 * 11) 1998 DNA study sect, first paragraph The Jefferson family assertions about Carr paternity of Eston Hemings were disproved in a 1998 DNA study which tested the Y-chromosome of direct male-line descendants of Eston Hemings, the Carr male line, and the Jefferson male line. In addition it tested male descendants of Thomas Woodson, who have a tradition of descent from Jefferson. is uncited.
 * 12) Monticello Community sect, why is second word in this sect header capitalized?
 * 13) Monticello Community sect, After Hemings moved his family to Madison, Wisconsin in 1852, they took the surname Jefferson and entered the white community. His descendants married and identified as white from then on.'' last sentence of 2nd paragraph is uncited.
 * 14) Representation in other media sect, this sect strikes me as sort of awkward or odd, it has both prose and list format, suggest perhaps finding secondary sources and modifying to prose paragraph format.
 * 15) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!