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Jesus College, Oxford
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because getting this to FA would complete the set of bronze stars in the Featured Topic about the college, and I'd like some ideas as to what's still needed. It's a recent GA, following earlier delisting, and draws upon subsidiary FA/FL articles for some of its content. I'm particularly looking for thoughts as to what else the article should include, or whether it includes matters that it shouldn't (e.g. too much detail when there's a subsidiary article to look at).
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, BencherliteTalk 16:18, 15 October 2009 (UTC)

Drive by comments by Charles Edward

The article is a good read, and well referenced. It could stand for a light copy edit in places, but is certainly worthly of its current quality rating. A few things that jump out at me:
 * Getting a second set of eyes to perform a copy edit should clear up the last few prose issues. It is pretty close to being FA worthy though in its current state.
 * What is the significance of the grace section? Is a school prayer something common or noteworty and the school, or schools in the region?
 * I am similiarly curious about the silverware section. Is a silverware collection common in the region's schools? Or is this a special collection? If so, where it did come from, who started it, and where is it displayed?
 * I don't see any section discussing graduation rate, average student scores, and how the univierstity compares academically to other similiar or oxferd universities.

Overall this is a very good article. I don't see much to hold it back from passing a featured article review. &mdash;Charles Edward (Talk 18:31, 28 October 2009 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your helpful comments. (By happy coincidence, one of the professors at the college is Thomas Charles-Edwards, with one notable alumnus being Thomas Charles Edwards, but I assume you're not related to either!)
 * I'll certainly get another pair of eyes to read it over before going to FAC.
 * I've always been unhappy about the "grace" section. I think it was probably included originally because the article on Oriel College, Oxford (which is an FA) has the college grace included.  I'll have a look at shifting the text to another project.
 * Most of the Oxford colleges have decent silver collections, used on special occasions but not normally on display. This section could do with some more details, you're quite right. I ought to include that all of the plate owned by the college at the time of the English Civil War was given to Charles I to help with his fundraising in the fighting, and never replaced by his heirs!
 * I think your idea about an academic results section, or similar, is a good one - it would also be a good place to give a brief explanation of the relationship between an Oxford college and Oxford University itself. BencherliteTalk 14:15, 29 October 2009 (UTC)