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John Johnson (footballer)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I hope to make it to the FA.

Thanks, RRD13 (talk) 10:37, 9 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review) Hope that's helpful, and good luck! &mdash; Cirt (talk) 18:22, 25 October 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 2) Checklinks tool shows a few problems throughout with links and slow links. I strongly suggest archiving as many as possible with added parameters archiveurl= and archivedate= with Internet Archive links.
 * 3) Per WP:LEAD, consider expanding the lede intro sect, (four paragraphs), so it may function as a standalone summary of the entire article's contents.
 * 4) 2 total images used in article, those will require an image review at either WP:GAN or WP:FAC, suggest you go over all those image pages and make sure all fields are filled in and all licensing checks out okay.
 * 5) Appears to be well cited throughout with very good use of in-line citations.
 * 6) 5 uses of direct quotations from sources. Consider removing all or some of these and paraphrasing, instead. You'll have an easier time at FAC that way, trust me.
 * 7) Style of play sect, not the best title for this sect, perhaps just Commentary or Analysis. Because the sect is only about secondary source commentary.
 * 8) Honours sect, entire sect appears to be uncited.
 * 9) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!

Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review) Good luck! Please also take a look at my football-related Peer Review, Kareldorado (talk) 12:05, 26 October 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 2) Generally very good looking - neat structure and well cited.
 * 3) A WP on referencing (can't find the name immediately) recommended the use of one these formats in citations: YYYY-MM-DD or abbreviation into three letters of the month, so "21 January 2014" would become either "2014-01-21" or "21 Jan 2014".
 * 4) If applicable, also mention the author in the citation with the parameters "|first=" and "|last=" or "|author=".
 * 5) Perhaps a line on personal life? This is no must of course, it would be merely illustrative.
 * 6) In the Style of play section, in the first sentence the word "but" seems needless.
 * 7) Use of less direct quotations from sources, as already mentioned.
 * 8) Perhaps in the "External links" section you can also refer to other websites considered reliable regarding soccer statistics, like Soccerway or National Football Teams.
 * 9) Copy the citations regarding the honours used in the text to the "Honours" section. I just got aware that I will have to do the same in my article undergoing Peer Review.
 * 10) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!