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Jonuz Kaceli
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would know what I could improve on the article.

Thanks, Vinie007 18:57, 11 June 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this article, here are some suggestions for improvement.
 * A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are many FA political biographies at Featured_articles which should have some useful model articles.
 * The lead does not really follow WP:LEAD. It should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article, and as such nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. However the fact that he was one of the 23 victims of the regime's Massacre of 1951 is only in the lead.
 * For expansion ideas, my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
 * The article leaves me with more questions than answers. What did his company do? WHy did the regime arrest him? What is the background of the massacre? Why was he singled out as one of the victims?
 * A good rule to remember is provide context to the reader - my guess is that readers from Albania will know much more about the massacre, but the general reader needs some background and context.
 * The image File:Junuz Kaceli.png has to specify the source - where did the photo come from? It cannot be PD if the source etc are not specified (and even then I assume it is WP:FAIR USE as I imagine the image is still under copyright)
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * Lots of little typos. June is the ENglish spelling (not Juni). He received the death penalty, not the "dead penalty" - this needs a copyedit.
 * Not much else to say as it is so short an article
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 13:58, 18 June 2011 (UTC)