Wikipedia:Peer review/Josef Fitzthum/archive1

Josef Fitzthum
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because…an image has been added to the infobox from the German Wikipedia page of Josef Fitzthum. Would like to see the article assessed from "Stub" and assess WP Germany. I feel an effort has been made to improve the article from a "Stub". Feedback would be appreciated. Thanks, Adamdaley (talk) 23:33, 16 December 2010 (UTC)

AustralianRupert
I've updated the assessment to Start class. I am unable to assess B2 (coverage and accuracy), but feel that at least each paragraph needs an inline citation at the end of the paragraph if it is to make B class. Beyond that, other suggestions I have are mainly presentation:
 * there is a typo in this clause: "as a commander of the for the establishment of the Aufstellung..." (of the for the...) which should be fixed;
 * there is an issue with this clause: "...the Austrians had done here during..." ("here" is the issue, it should be "there");
 * what is the relevance of the Literature section? Is it necessary? Does it relate to the conflict as a whole, or just to the subject? AustralianRupert (talk) 03:05, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Australian Rupert - To me the literature maybe books containing additional information about Josef Fitzthum and the Waffen SS he was in during World War II? I don't have any of those books, or read German, even though I did learn a little German in High School for 10 weeks. Thanks for looking at the article. Adamdaley (talk) 05:35, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Australian Rupert - They are books containing information. Although I cannot find ALL of them on [Amazon.com], the one's I do find are books containing the author's name and name of book.  Maybe that section could be renamed to "Further Reading"? Adamdaley (talk) 09:11, 24 December 2010 (UTC)

Hchc2009
This isn't a period I'm a specialist in, but one gap in the article seems to be Fitzhum's political views. It notes that he was notable as a politician, and I'm guessing (given his SS links!) that he was on the right-wing of European politics at the time, but it would be useful to explain what he stood for, why he was politically detained etc. Hchc2009 (talk) 17:31, 18 December 2010 (UTC)

To be honest, I'm not much into politics myself especially a foreign country's politics and a time that was way before my time! Adamdaley (talk) 11:25, 21 December 2010 (UTC)