Wikipedia:Peer review/Joseph "Diamond Jo" Reynolds/archive1

Joseph "Diamond Jo" Reynolds
I've listed this article for peer review because I have expanded this article from a stub. I would like feedback on how well it meets the B-standard and if it merits a GA-review. My main concern is the length of the article, though I suspect I may have exhausted the reliable sources on the subject. The article is thoroughly sourced, reasonably well-written, and stylistically consistent. Thanks, Oldsanfelipe (talk) 12:30, 7 September 2018 (UTC)
 * This needs more work than I expected. This edit in 2015 added unsourced material, but I have now discovered its source:  (see pp. 207208), revealing some possible COPYVIOs. This needs a serious re-write, so I will not waste more of anyone else's time. Thanks Eddie891 for your feedback. I also need to do some more reading on Diamond Jo. Sincerely, Oldsanfelipe (talk) 20:47, 9 September 2018 (UTC)

Eddie891

 * Lede can use some expansion, by a few sentences.
 * Perhaps add what year he married Mary Morton.
 * The article seems to have some WP:NPOV problems, with phrases like "The finest mill in the region"
 * "Ever after he was called "Diamond Jo"." the sentence just sounds a bit odd, perhaps re word
 * I'd like to see more information about the shipping business, if it's what he was most known for. Eddie891 Talk Work 12:20, 9 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Hi Eddie891: Starting with the most critical issue, point No. 3...There was part of the text I kept working around because I could not locate the source, even to validate the reference, which was incomplete. The language was stilted because some of those phrases are repetitions from Peterson, Willliam J. "Joseph Reynolds" The Palimpsest 24:7 (1943), p. 207 (long download times, so be patient if you can): . I just deleted those sentences and the associated citation.
 * Marriage to Mary Morton: all of the sources I have located so far are vague on this point.
 * Looking for additional sources for information about his transportation businesses.
 * Will edit to address points 1 and 4. Thanks for your help, Oldsanfelipe (talk) 15:13, 9 September 2018 (UTC)