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Joseph Szigeti
I've been working on this for a while, and I'd very much like to see it as a Featured Article sometime in the not-too-distant future. I know it's nowhere near FA caliber yet, but I'm not entirely sure what I should focus on improving to move towards that goal. Suggestions, general comments and constructive criticisms would be much appreciated. K. Lásztocska 01:47, 25 June 2007 (UTC)
 * A couple of quick things:
 * There's a bit of a sense of pageant here--a succession of accomplishments. Can you find sources that comment on his style, on his interpretive influences and positions, on the things, in short, that make him stand out?  Not just what makes him good, but what makes him Szigeti.
 * By the same token, you may be relying a bit much on the autobiography. Musicologists writing on Szigeti may help provide context—to what extent he was a product of his time and place, to what extent he was different; that sort of thing.  One thing I would definitely flesh out is what is now the second paragraph of the "Maturity" section, which discusses the composers whose works he premiered.  Isn't his interpretation of those works his chief contribution?
 * Full citation is only needed for each source the first time. After that you can abbreviate.  "With Strings Attached, p. 36," or whatever.
 * If you bring this to WP:FA, they'll want you to tone down the prose a bit and avoid peacock terms.
 * I'm very glad to see this article improving! It was sorely in need of it. Keep up the good work. Chick Bowen 05:12, 26 June 2007 (UTC)


 * Excellent advice, thank you. I had been planning to add a whole second part to the article about critical response, comments on his style, his influence on other violinists etc. Basically the whole first thing you suggested--I've been awfully busy in real life and I somehow completely forgot my plans for this article. Thanks for reminding me!
 * As for the autobiography, I was afraid of that. To my knowledge there has never been a biography written of him by anyone else, so for life details that's pretty much all I'm going on at this point. Once I add more info about style, reception, legacy etc., I'll certainly be able to find other sources.
 * I know...peacock terms...that's what happens when you let me write an article about my favorite violinist ever. :-) Don't worry, I know how to be neutral, I'll tone it down eventually.
 * Thanks again for the excellent critique--I'll start work on implementing these suggestions as soon as I can. K. Lásztocska 14:12, 26 June 2007 (UTC)
 * just think *girl* peacock instead and you should be OK —Preceding unsigned comment added by Istvan (talk • contribs) 03:15, 5 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Maybe I shouldn't come here at midnight (immediately after practicing Bach for three hours), but that one went right over my head, dear. K. Lásztocska talk 05:17, 5 January 2008 (UTC)