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Justin Tuck

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because…

I've improved the article since the last PR. Please note that Tuck is a back-up DE (at the moment) and has been injured for a great deal of his pro career, so expansion of some areas is very difficult because there are no reliable sources found. Tuck is now a player on the rise and I have put a lot of hard work into this article.

Thanks, Endless Dan 14:44, 6 May 2008 (UTC)

Overall the article looks close to GA. Some comments:
 * Comments from
 * Per Manual of Style (headings), avoid using special characters (ex: &+{}[]) in headings.
 * Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement.
 * This article is about a person, so add  along with the required parameters to the article - see Persondata for more information.
 * This article is well referenced. I would consider adding a "See Also" section as well.
 * Is this a reliable source? Seems like a blog too me. Find an alternative.
 * That's it fro me. «  Milk's Favorite Cookie  (  talk  /  contribs ) 01:16, 13 May 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I agree with Milk's Favorite Cookie's comments, Here are a few more suggestions for improvement for the article: Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:46, 13 May 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead should be a summary of the whole article and nothing should be only in the lead - per WP:LEAD. I would add the first paragraph in the lead to the Personal life section or before the high school football section. Since the lead is the most important stuff, I would not include the fact about his father building the house in the lead in any case.
 * I would also add the details about the philanthropy in the lead to Personal life.
 * Do not use & in the text unless it is a direct quote, so change Growing up, Tuck's favorite football teams were the San Francisco 49ers[9] & Dallas Cowboys[10] but his favorite sport was...
 * Awkward language (heavily waged) Due to the game's low score, opinions were heavily waged that Tuck better deserved the MVP award over Eli Manning.[17][20][21][22][23] I also think it is always better to give specifics - i.e. say who felt that Tuck deserved the MVP.