Wikipedia:Peer review/Kanon/archive1

Kanon
The article has recently gone through a lot of improvements in order to build it up to GA status. I am looking for suggestions on how to improve it further.-- (  十八  |   talk  ) 06:00, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Should we include information about the card game? Normally, I wouldn't find anime cards to be noteworthy enough, but the fact that it's a playable game piques my curiousity. Maybe spin it off to its own little article if we can find enough information on it.--SeizureDog 11:28, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
 * To update on that, it seems that it is actually part of a larger card game known as Lycée, which looks to be the coolest freaking CCG since Magic. I so want some now >< --SeizureDog 11:36, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
 * I don't think mention of it should be in the main article. Regardless, I see that you have already made the article on it: Lycée Trading Card Game.-- (  十八  |   talk  ) 22:15, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes, I no longer think so either. --SeizureDog 10:53, 9 January 2007 (UTC)

I think that the images could be spread further apart, especially the first three. There's some whitespace after the lead, maybe an image could be put there. --Squilibob 02:47, 7 January 2007 (UTC)
 * White space after the lead? Well of course there is, every page on Wikipedia with an appreciable TOC has that huge white space, but I can't put an image there because of the TOC and infobox, plus it wouldn't be standard to do so, or did you mean soemthing else and I just read it wrong? As for the spacing of the first three images, the only solution would be to move both the Settings and themes and Gamplay sections down below the Characters section due to the very large infobox on the right and the fact that it would obstruct the images. Of course, we could always left-align the images; would that help?-- (  十八  |   talk  ) 02:05, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Ok the whitespace would probably be a bad place. I have just read Guide_to_layout and moving images out of context is a bad idea. I think that all that needed to be done was move the picture of the city to the beginning of the section, no need to left align them when there's a fair amount of space between them, which is what the article now has. I think the article will pass GA this time. --Squilibob 05:56, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
 * But the picture of the city must still be left-aligned because of the infobox. I merely left-aligned the pic of Ayu as well to make it seem more consistent; Ayu could be moved back if need be.-- (  十八  |   talk  ) 06:16, 8 January 2007 (UTC)

I just did a copyedit of the article again. What does this line mean? : "The story came from the video game version that preceded was illustrated by Petit Morishima." I was confused. --Squilibob 10:25, 9 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Ah, something must have gotten deleted; I fixed it. Thanks for the copy edit. (  十   八  ) 10:35, 9 January 2007 (UTC)

Looks decent to me, the only thing that i noticed needing fixing are all the red links, they either need to be unlinked or someone make an article for them. --Malevious Userpage •Talk Page• Contributions 20:03, 10 January 2007 (UTC)
 * On that note, there are certain red links that cannot be created due to lack of information even on the Japanese wiki. These include: Petit Morishima and Mariko Shimizu. While others like Visual Art's, Paradigm, and Prototype I just haven't gotten around to creating but I'll try to do that soon. And then I'll unlink the red links in the Reception section. And while I would rather not unlink Petit Morishima and Mariko Shimizu because someone may come along and create them in time, right now I don't see that happening anytime soon, so I'll delink those as well. (  十   八  ) 20:27, 10 January 2007 (UTC)