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Karakuridôji Ultimo

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for December 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for December 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review for GA-class. A section I would like to be reviewed is the Media section. Comments. I honestly don't know what else needs to be done so i'll take any comments. : )

Thanks, –  J U M P G U R U   ■ ask ㋐㋜㋗ ■ 00:00, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:36, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Article needs a copyedit to clean up the language and for typos. I do not think it is up to GA standards with its current language.
 * For example "it's" is a contraction for "it is", but "it's" is often used where the possessive "its" should be used.
 * Or should it be "Mt. Fuji" instead of Mt. Fuzi?
 * Or this sentence  Also a man in Central Tokyo has invested into the moment and member K found Vice's arm and planned to take all of it's power. - I do not know what "has invested into the moment" means, the "it's" error is there, and I am not sure what it means to take the power from a detached arm.
 * The plot does not make clear to me which robot is good and which is evil.
 * Given the one critical review cited, quoting so much of the Stan Lee press releases might be seen as being too POV?


 * Thank you! I fixed the "it's" errors, I make them alot. Sorry bout that. : P Mt. Fuzi is actually what they called it for some reason. –  J U M P G U R U   ■ ask ㋐㋜㋗ ■ 05:50, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I changed that one sentence to Member K found Vice's powerful shape-shifting arm and planned to obtain all of its power. If that makes more sense. : P –  J U M P G U R U   ■ ask ㋐㋜㋗ ■ 05:54, 20 December 2008 (UTC)