Wikipedia:Peer review/Kirkby/archive1

Kirkby


I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see how it could be changed and improved.

Thanks, Neon (Talk) 10:48, 25 December 2020 (UTC)

Neon, I scanned the article and here's my initial comments: Thanks, LM150 13:05, 1 January 2021 (UTC)
 * There are too many paragraphs of uncited text. For instance, the sections: History, Governance, Demography, and Regeneration plans, need more reliable sources to support their statements.
 * Too much attention is given to Tesco regeneration and Recent regeneration plans. Remember that Wikipedia is not your local newspaper and you should avoid reporting information that sounds like news.
 * Economy section - write more about the present day situation, and not the future
 * Education section - is it necessary to use tables here and list number of pupils? Number of pupils will get outdated quickly.
 * Insert more photos! Show the local buildings, and points of interest. There's many pictures available according to Wikimedia Commons.
 * I strongly recommend looking at Keswick, Cumbria, Ashton-under-Lyne and Stretford. These are not perfect articles but they will give you a strong sense of writing style.
 * Are there any local landmarks to write about?
 * The Notable Citizens section is at risk of looking too bloated and trivial. Try to write this in prose and don't expand it anymore!
 * See how to improve your writing for more tips on tightening your writing style