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Kirkcaldy
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because i need an editor to address the prose, grammar and flow. Since the last peer review, some copy-editing has been completed and i have also formatted references in line with the Wikipedia:Feature article criteria. The article has had one unsuccesful nomination for FA last year, but i am still aiming to get to FA status.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, Kilnburn (talk) 18:27, 15 May 2012 (UTC)

Comments Will come back to this. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:56, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Two dab links, "turnpike" and "terraces".
 * I'd consider making the first two hatnotes into a single line so the article isn't pushed too far south.
 * The lead is a little odd for me, it's supposed to summarise the whole article, but right now it seems to just deal with the early history and then industry/employment. Nothing else is really mentioned.
 * "The battle fought between the Angles and an alliance, was led by King Áedán mac Gabráin of Dál Riata, of Scots, Picts and Britons." -> "The battle was fought between the Angles and an alliance led by ...." perhaps?
 * "(reign 1058-93)" needs an en-dash.
 * Apply that to all other year ranges (see WP:DASH).
 * Don't think you really need to link commons terms such as wool or salt...
 * Could link Transport Scotland.
 * I think "first past the post" is typically hyphenated.
 * Maybe my ignorance but shouldn't "are tributary to the " be "are tributaries"?
 * Ensure all tables meet MOS:DTT for row and col scopes so that they can be accessed by screen readers.
 * "about 90 less than " shouldn't that be 90 "fewer".
 * "Total Population" -> "Total population".
 * "Foreign Born" -> "Foreign born".
 * "Over 75 Years Old" -> "Over 75 years old".
 * "Population Change" -> "Population change".

The Rambling Man (talk) 16:43, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "by Webster's Topographical Dictionary of Scotland in 1755," shouldn't the book title be in italics?
 * " Early manufacturing and in neighbouring Pathhead consisted" doesn't make sense to me.
 * " terms of floor space" do you mean "retail" floor space?
 * Could link A92 road for our international audience.
 * Don't overlink Ingolstadt.
 * "Sport and Leisure" -> "Sport and leisure".
 * It's Raith Rovers F.C. (note the full stops in F.C.)
 * "the town's senior football team, "-> "the town's professional association football team".
 * "the highest tier of the Scottish Football League at their ground," while true, I believe this to be mildly misleading to those who aren't aware of a thing called the SPL.
 * In the Landmarks section, I get some text squashed between images which is undesirable.
 * " 339-343" (etc) needs en-dash, not hyphen.
 * "all children 5–13" -> children aged 5 to 13.
 * Could link "Education (Scotland) Act" to Elementary Education Act 1870.
 * What is the inclusion criteria for "notable residents"? It's usually a bad idea to have these sections in any article.
 * Apply the en-dash (per WP:DASH) to page ranges in the refs.
 * Be consistent. Is there a space after the p. or not in the refs?
 * Are all those external links really specifically relevant to Kirkcaldy?