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Leprechaun
I've tried to improve this article from this to its current state, but I've run out of things to say. I've added references, illustrations and some more info, I could just do with some further pointers to what the article is missing, what people think needs to be added etc.
 * The preceeding comment was by FrancisTyers, 21:38, 21 December 2005 — please sign!

Looks like a nice article. Some points:


 * Remove the NOTOC


 * Ok - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)


 * In the lead, the third sentence "... having many treasure crocks buried during war-time" is very unclear. Why during war-time?


 * I should quote this, its from Yeats. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)


 * The lead section should briefly summarise the whole article, so add a few words about mischief and shoe-making; that would fill out the third para. of the lead
 * Done. - FrancisTyers 20:19, 23 December 2005 (UTC)
 * Seems like there ought to be more tales of leprechauns that you could put in the Mythology section


 * Yup, looking for some more. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)
 * Filled that out some more. - FrancisTyers 01:30, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
 * In Appearance, some words about pre-Yeats ideas of leprechaun appearance; the picture caption mentions that there was less of a stereotyped idea, this could be mentioned/expanded in the text, which is currently a little terse


 * Yeah, I'm looking at the moment, its difficult to find good info on the internet though, I might try adding some stuff from the irish emigrant site or finding the McAnally book which both that and Yeats reference. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)


 * Pop Culture might be better organised, maybe as a list
 * Re "an episode of The Simpsons" — it would be really cool to say which episode
 * For a dash separating clauses in a sentence, use the "em dash" instead of a single or double normal dash. The em dash looks like this — a bit longer than a normal dash, so it looks a bit less dwarfed by the spaces either side.  Get an em dash by clicking on it in the list under the edit window, by typing "&amp;mdash;", or (on Linux) by typing the shortcut "Compose dash dash dash".  Compose is often the right alt key.  (See Manual of Style (dashes).)


 * Thanks, will attend to that... - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)


 * Image captions should be complete sentences (see Captions).


 * Ok - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)


 * I think it's a little terse overall, and I actually think that some of the material from the older version could be restored. Eg. in pop culture, entries like this would be appropriate:
 * "In an episode of The Simpsons, Bartender Moe Syzlak suggests to Homer Simpson that he use a leprechaun to get rid of a curse, claiming that they arrive in the U.S. in the wheel-wells of the aircraft of Irish airline Aer Lingus."


 * Hmm, maybe, I was trying to get away from a list of pop-culture references that the original was, although maybe if the article had more in terms of the other sections it wouldn't look so skewed. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)

I did a copy editing pass to address some of the above, plus a few grammar issues. Overall, I think it's pretty good. — Johantheghost 21:22, 22 December 2005 (UTC)


 * Thanks :) - FrancisTyers 01:30, 24 December 2005 (UTC)