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Lightning (Final Fantasy)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… I hope to bring this article to Featured Status, and need input from other editors on it. There are probably multiple things that need addressing before I take it to FAR. If you can think of any constructive edits at once, do them, but if you think discussion is needed, place it here or on the article's talk page if it's rather weighty. I'm grateful for your suggestions.

Thanks, ProtoDrake (talk) 17:08, 27 August 2014 (UTC)

I think the prose has some awkward stretches, such as in the third paragraph of the intro. I'm gonna copyedit a bit if you don't mind. Tezero (talk) 03:39, 28 August 2014 (UTC)
 * Not at all. Do all you think is needed. --ProtoDrake (talk) 08:19, 29 August 2014 (UTC)
 * Oh, forgot to reply here. I think I'm done with the glaring stuff, but you can look for more copyeditors if you want. At the least, I don't think anyone's going to oppose the FAC on poor prose (aside from one of JimmyBlackwing's temporary opposes, maybe) as happened with Dota 2; this isn't full of a bunch of redundancies like that was. Tezero (talk) 23:28, 7 September 2014 (UTC)