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Lisa Goes Gaga
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like for it to become a featured article one day. I would like some feedback on the current state of the article, and provide any areas of concern that should be addressed.

Thanks, —DAP388 (talk) 19:48, 1 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 18:16, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Three paras a little too much for an article of this length.
 * Where is the prod code referenced?
 * It says "Zii" in the infobox but links to Wii. Maybe worth a note.
 * "prompting Gaga to go out " followed by "Lady Gaga guest-starred " if you wish to call her Gaga alone, then do so, but be consistent.
 * "transpired" nope, they just "took place".
 * "Television critics were divided with "Lisa Goes Gaga", who despite adulating the singer's performance, was critical of" -> "Television critics were divided with "Lisa Goes Gaga", who, despite adulating the singer's performance, were critical of"
 * "a 2.1 rating in the 18–49 demographic" what does that mean to anyone outside of America?
 * Why is Bart linked to "Bart Simpsons"?
 * "Lisa then catches Gaga just before she leaves town to apologize, and after being forgiven Lisa and Gaga perform a duet together. " ouch, perhaps "Lisa catches Gaga just before she leaves town to apologize, and after being forgiven she and Gaga perform a duet together."?
 * "to compliment Gaga's outré" no idea what that means.  A good example of something to actually link!
 * "from the respective demographic" is that the best way of explaining this?
 * Ref 20, for example, why is it L., Teresa and not just Lopez, Teresa?
 * Check for WP:DASH fails in the ref titles.

I'm gonna give my 2 cents worth of input, with the FAC criteria in mind. I normally never watch this show; this is actually the only episode that I've watched. I know little of Lady Gaga, and that's because my friends made me listen to this "Born This Way" single. Okay, I'm gonna stop my soporific rambling right now. On with my 2 cents to the peer review.


 * Lead
 * ""Lisa Goes Gaga" is the twenty-second and final episode of The Simpsons' twenty-third season." I suggest that you change that to: ""Lisa Goes Gaga" is the twenty-second and final episode of the twenty-third season of the animated television series The Simpsons." Notice it was important to wikilink "twenty-third season".
 * "Tim Long wrote the episode with Matthew Schofield as director." ...as the director of what? Every aspect of this, and any, sentence needs to be clear. Try: "The episode was written by Tim Long and directed by Matthew Schofield."
 * "Tevision critics were divided with "Lisa Goes Gaga", who, despite adulating the singer's performance, were critical of of the episode's concept and general execution." Personally I don't like that wording. Also notice the "of of" in your phrase. I think a better way to say it would be: "Critical responses to the episode were mixed; critics praised Lady Gaga's performance, while they looked down upon the episode's concept and general execution."
 * "Upon airing, the installment attained 4.79 million viewers and a 2.1 rating in the 18–49 demographic, according to the Nielsen Media Research." Nah, please go with: "According to the Nielsen ratings, the installment attained 4.79 million viewers during its original airing." The 2.1 rating part is not as significant for the lead and thus should be removed. The Reception section already covers that anyway.


 * Plot, production, reception reviews ... more to come.

89119 (talk) 07:50, 21 June 2012 (UTC)