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List of Arizona Cardinals head coaches

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I'm hopful I can get this to FL status.

Thanks, Bucs (talk) 11:17, 18 August 2008 (UTC)


 * [[Image:Reviewglass.svg|15px]] Review by Killervogel5

All right, if you're looking for an FL push, I'll give you the straight FLC review as if I were going to look at a nomination. I hope this helps. I can re-review after you've looked it over if you'd like; just tell me on my talk page. If not, I will see it again at its FLC as well. KV5 •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  21:41, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
 * No lead image - certainly there is something you can use, it's very bland without it.
 * No, these's nothing, I looked everywhere. Bucs (talk) 08:35, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Cardinals stadium crop.jpg will work fine. KV5  •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  13:03, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
 * That's just where the team plays, it has nothing to do with the subject of this article. BUC (talk) 10:25, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
 * It's a start. It needs something; it won't pass FLC without one. KV5  •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  00:07, 7 September 2008 (UTC)
 * The bold text seems forced; it's not necessary, especially over a list of that many cities. For that matter, I think that it should just be Arizona Cardinals. You can talk about the other cities later.
 * 'The Cardinals franchise originates in 1898," - should be "originated"
 * Reference needed for the "Cardinal red" statement.
 * "They then joined the APFA in 1920 making them the oldest franchise in the NFL." - that doesn't make them the oldest team in the NFL.
 * There is a large proportion of red links in the table, I would really like to see stubs created for some/most of them before it hits the FLC.
 * Many people at FLC are going to ask for a sortable table and removal of the colspans. That will require you to re-link each occurence of each name and each season. That way, coaches' tenures are not split up either.
 * No piont really. It would only other them alphabetically. Bucs (talk) 08:46, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm just telling you what will be asked for during an FLC. KV5  •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  13:03, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
 * List headers have to be linked (playoffs, awards, regular season, etc.), as many articles as can be appropriately found.
 * What should they link to? Bucs (talk) 08:55, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Playoffs#Playoffs_in_the_National_Football_League, NFL#Awards, and Regular season (NFL). KV5  •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  13:03, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
 * For the playoff columns and the repeated coaches, I would much prefer to see em-dashes as opposed to en-dashes used for the blank years.
 * Coach of the year should be Coach of the Year.
 * Your footnote is blank.
 * "Arizona History" under General references is misspelled.
 * "The all-time leader in games coached is Jim Hanifan, with 89 and in wins is Don Coryell with 42.[2]" - Split this into two sentences or use a semicolon. It's stunted right now.
 * "Zero" is not a winning percentage - it should be "with a winning percentage of .000"
 * Don't italicize Racine Street Cardinals.
 * There should be a comma after Racine Street Cardinals.
 * "They then joined the APFA" - remove then.
 * De-link "As of 2008".
 * "over 1,100 games" - an exact number would be much nicer.
 * That would require a lot of updating. Bucs (talk) 08:44, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes, these things happen. If it's going to be an FL, it will take a lot of work too.  KV5  •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  13:03, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
 * What I mean is it will need updating constently even if it get to FL status. BUC (talk) 10:24, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
 * That's why you don't update during an active season, only at the end. KV5  •  Squawk box  •  Fight on!  00:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)
 * "in a total of 88 seasons" - "a total of" is redundant; just "in 88 seasons" is good.
 * "In those games" - you can just get rid of that altogether.
 * "while Ray Willsey, Ray Prochaska and Chuck Drulis combined, are statistically the best, with a winning percentage of 1.000." - Having three coaches is a unique circumstance; a short explanation of why this happened should be included in the lead.