Wikipedia:Peer review/List of F-Zero characters/archive1

List of F-Zero characters

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've made significant efforts to clean this list up and look forward to get it up to a higher quality. Before I go on to fix up a lot references which aren't formatted perfectly and write up any more character descriptions I would like any suggestions on improvements to the list. More specifically, comments on the structure of the list and what do, if anything, with those one-time appearance (Maximum Velocity / F-Zero AX) characters. Relisted peer review to generate a more thorough discussion.  « ₣M₣ »  17:11, 16 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Well, it's certainly an interesting format. I have two concerns: first, it needs information on reception/merchandise to really be complete. Secondly, I'm unsure about half the references being from Allgame... Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk  ) 23:41, 21 April 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I have never heard of this game, but will try to give some suggestions for improvement, with an eye to what might be a problem at FLC: Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:48, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead is completely unreferenced - in a list there needs to be refs in the lead, since much of this material is not repeated in the article.
 * Problem sentence ...which makes the series akin to something out of an American comic book. reads like original research without a cite, see WP:CITE and WP:NOR
 * Article needs a copyedit - one example is the caption The most characters to debut in a single game is F-Zero X which brought twenty-seven new characters into the franchise. should read something like The most characters to debut in a single game is twenty-seven, in F-Zero X.
 * Provide context - identify Takaya Imamura (as is done later in The producer, Shigeru Miyamoto, wanted more ...) See WP:PCR
 * Explain abbreviations the first time, so SNES would be Super Nintendo Entertainment System (SNES)
 * Who is Captain Falcon? IGN called Captain Falcon "one of the most important and recognizable characters from the franchise".[3]
 * First paragraph in Characters is uncited.
 * Since this is a list, why all the info on Captain Falcon?
 * A model article is often useful List of characters in Castlevania: Aria of Sorrow and Dawn of Sorrow is a FL, although a very different kind of list. List of cast members of The Simpsons or List of Harry Potter cast members might also give ideas.
 * Intro says four characters in the first game, but only three are in the list.
 * Are the Original descriptions just direct quotes? If so this seems to be CopyVio and a violation of "Fair Use" - see WP:FAIR USE
 * Small print is hard to read
 * Any reason why tables are not sortable?
 * Do the sources used meet WP:RS?
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful.