Wikipedia:Peer review/List of HOT and ETL lanes in the United States/archive1

List of HOT and ETL lanes in the United States
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it is a very thorough list, and is very detailed.

Thanks, --Tim Sabin (talk) 03:19, 30 October 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I assume that you might want to eventually try for featured list, so here are some suggestions for improvement based on the WP:MOS and WP:WIAFL. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:32, 6 November 2009 (UTC)
 * Lists are not supposed to start with "This is a list of ..." anymore.
 * The current lead is two one-sentence paragraphs, which does not meet WP:LEAD. The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
 * Watch WP:OVERLINKing - for example High occupancy/toll and express toll lanes is linked twice in 2 setneces in the lead.
 * Also watch dab (disambiguation) links - hybrid is one. There is a tool for finding dab links in the toolbox on this page.
 * Avoid the use of words like currently - use "As of 2009" instead or something more date specific. Now /current/etc. can get out of date quickly.
 * WP:HEAD says that section headers should not repeat the name of the article if possible. What if the one header were "High occuoancy/toll lanes" and the subsections were Current and Planned or Current and Future?
 * I would not have a header "Current ETL lanes" with the only information under it that there are none. Here could it just be "Express toll lanes" ?
 * Have you thought of making this into tables and then making those sortable?
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V


 * Thanks, Ruhrfisch. I am thinking of making a run for FL, and these comments certainly will help. --Tim Sabin (talk) 02:24, 6 November 2009 (UTC)


 * You are very welcome - I am not sure, but some people might object to the specific toll / pricing information per What_Wikipedia_is_not. Another useful thing is to find an FL or two that are as related as possible and use it/them for a model article. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:34, 6 November 2009 (UTC)