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List of Madonna concert tours
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to nominate the article for Featured List and just want some inputs as to whether the language or the show of the article is fine. Thanks, --Legolas  ( talk 2 me ) 13:22, 13 May 2010 (UTC)

My suggestions:

Intro


 * Her debut, The Virgin Tour in 1985, was based in North America only. > Her 1985 debut, The Virgin Tour, was based in North America only.


 * In 1987 she embarked on her first worldwide concert the Who's That Girl World Tour, which visited Europe, North America and Japan. > In 1987 she embarked on the worldwide Who's That Girl World Tour, which visited Europe, North America and Japan.


 * It was critically appreciated for Madonna's showmanship and the exquisite dresses.


 * She then followed this with the Blond Ambition World Tour in 1990, which was called by Rolling Stone as "the best tour of 1990." > She then followed this with the Blond Ambition World Tour in 1990, which Rolling Stone called "the best tour of 1990."


 * In 1993, she embarked on The Girlie Show World Tour which had her visiting for the first time to Israel, Turkey, the Latin America and Australia. > In 1993, she embarked on The Girlie Show World Tour where she visited Israel and Turkey for the first time, followed by Latin America and Australia.


 * Madonna did not go on the road again until 2001, when she toured with the Drowned World Tour. > Madonna did not go on the road again until the Drowned World Tour in 2001.

Tours


 * The Virgin Tour was the debut concert tour of Madonna. The tour promoted her first two albums, Madonna and Like a Virgin. > The Virgin Tour was Madonna's debut concert tour. It promoted her first two albums, Madonna and Like a Virgin.


 * The 37 concert dates of the Who's That Girl World Tour played to 2.5 million fans. It Madonna's first world tour, reaching Asia, North America and Europe. > The 37 concert dates of the Who's That Girl World Tour played to 2.5 million fans. It Madonna's first world tour, reaching Asia, North America and Europe.


 * Inspired by the 1972 film Cabaret, the tour was a widely publicized and media reported tour, mainly for its juxtaposition of Catholic imagery and sexual content. > Inspired by the 1972 film Cabaret, was widely publicized and, mainly for its juxtaposition of Catholic imagery and sexual content.


 * Rolling Stone called it an "elaborately choreographed, sexually provocative extravaganza" and proclaimed it "the best tour of 1990." > Rolling Stone called it an "elaborately choreographed, sexually provocative extravaganza" and proclaimed it "the best tour of 1990."


 * In 1991, a documentary film, Truth or Dare (aka In Bed with Madonna), was released chronicling the tour. > In 1991 documentary, Truth or Dare (aka "In Bed with Madonna"), was released chronicling the tour.


 * The tour was chronicled in a documentary titled I'm Going to Tell You a Secret. > The tour was chronicled in documentary  I'm Going to Tell You a Secret.


 * The Sticky & Sweet Tour was the eighth worldwide concert tour by American singer Madonna to promote her eleventh studio album, Hard Candy. > The Sticky & Sweet Tour was the eighth worldwide concert tour by Madonna her eleventh studio album, Hard Candy. (It's already been established that Madonna is an American artist.)

Now then, care to look over List of M*A*S*H episodes? Jimknut (talk) 21:14, 19 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your comments Jimknut. --Legolas  ( talk 2 me ) 06:33, 20 May 2010 (UTC)