Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Major League Baseball players from Japan/archive1

List of Major League Baseball players from Japan
This peer review discussion has been closed. Trying to get this list to FL status. It's not a huge list but it has a TON of information. I think the prose is pretty much done complete, just looking to clean it up and then help with formatting everything in the list to make it as clear as possible.

Thanks, -- T orsodo g Talk 04:50, 23 June 2015 (UTC)

Some brief comments from me: Not sure if those comments will be useful but hopefully they'll help. -- Shudde  talk 09:02, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Comments from Shudde
 * There is at least one duplicate link the lead (Hideo Nomo)
 * Of these players, ten are currently on MLB rosters. -- As per WP:RECENT I think it would be better to say, "Ten players are on MLB rosters for the 2015 Major League Baseball season." Or something similar.
 * exchange prospects this is jargon that could do with an explanation or link.
 * Is it "Minor league system", "Minor League system" or "minor league system" ?
 * Class-A team more jargon
 * this talent --> "him"?
 * basically a hands-off policy -- this may be a little bit colloquial and could probably do with some clarification
 * with Shinji Mori the only player not to have played in MLB due to injury. -- I think I know what you are trying to say here but it could definitely be worded better. He signed, but never played due to injury. It could be read as him being only one of many that never played, but the only one of those whose reason was injury.
 * The lead doesn't seem to omit any major points I'd expect to see so it's all good there.
 * Much of the material in the section Awards, records and notable accomplishments is not referenced via an inline citation, as well, it would probably be good to make clear what the inclusion criteria in this section ("notable accomplishments" is particularly vague). A small introduction could maybe address this.
 * Indicates the player was selected to the starting roster -- is it "selected to" or "selected in"? Is this an American English thing that's tripping me up?
 * The section World Series appearances lacks references. It's also not clear in this table what the bold teams in the "years" column represents (although I could guess). It would also probably help if this was formatted in such a way as the team and year all appeared on only one line.