Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Metal Gear Solid characters/archive1

List of Metal Gear Solid characters
This is a recent FLC failure. The main concern seemed to be the length of the lead, so there are 3 things I'd like to get out of the peer review. 1 is the lead long enough? 2 I’d like someone to check through the article to see if it is at "A class" standard yet and 3 is in regard to my use of further and main and whether or not I should use them or not, as one of the other issues was that the article seemed "messy". Cheers in advance

†he Bread 05:59, 9 December 2006 (UTC)


 * The thing I notice is pictures - could they be cropped to remove the subtitling? That, and it would be nice to have a picture along with the lead, unless there is a sort of infobox the article is missing. Seegoon 01:53, 10 December 2006 (UTC)
 * I myself have no tools with which to do that, but prehaps someone else could, there's pretty much no infobox for "list of character" articles, I was thinking about a pic in the lead, i'll have a look around †he Bread  03:45, 10 December 2006 (UTC)

Well done so far.--TheEmulatorGuy 03:08, 10 December 2006 (UTC)
 * Wow, um, bizzare. It seems I supported when the thing was closed. The page needs a notice (not the discussion page, I didn't come from there). Anyway, here's the suggestions I made:
 * In the Meryl Silverburgh section, it brings up Roy Campbell without explaining who he is or what he does. This could be remedied by bringing up Roy Campbell in the Solid Snake section.
 * Same deal in the Gray Fox section, except this time mentioning Otacon and Liquid Snake.
 * In the Revolver Ocelot section, who is Kenneth Baker? The Solid Snake section mentions the ArmsTech President, but not his name Kenneth Baker.
 * Big Boss is brought up in the Sniper Wolf section, but who is Big Boss?
 * In the Jim Houseman section, it says he is the mission controller via AWACS. Can you give a small iteration to what this is? (technical terms need to be explained)
 * Information on Big Boss (in various sections, or you could even create a new section) is a must.


 * I have done it all, there's a new Big Boss section and i've explained all the things you bought up †he Bread  04:58, 10 December 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 21:35, 10 December 2006 (UTC)
 * I've gone and checked the article through per the suggestions †he Bread  22:06, 10 December 2006 (UTC)


 * There is no free use image to go in the top corner, due to the articles subject †he Bread  07:35, 14 December 2006 (UTC)