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List of Minnesota Timberwolves head coaches

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because of featured topic criteria 3c, as this will be part of a potential featured topic.

Thanks, --  SRE.K.A.L. &#124; L.A.K.ERS ]]  22:01, 26 May 2009 (UTC)

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 * "The Timberwolves play"-->They play
 * "The team have"-->The team has
 * "McHale have been elected"-->McHale has been elected Dabomb87 (talk) 23:31, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
 * All done. --  SRE.K.A.L. &#124; L.A.K.ERS ]]  01:52, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Dabomb87 (talk) 20:17, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement, mostly language nitpicks. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:28, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Awkward sentence The team joined the NBA in 1989 as an expansion team with the Orlando Magic.[2] I think it means The team was one of two expansion teams that joined the NBA in 1989 (the other was Orlando Magic).[2]
 * I am not 100% clear what this means The Timberwolves has never been in the NBA Finals since its inception.[3] Is this the team's inception, or the inception of the NBA Finals (how I read it, but this does not make sense)?
 * How about combining these sentences to something like There have been eight head coaches for the Timberwolves; the first was Bill Musselman, who coached for two seasons.
 * McHale's winning percentage seems to be the only record statistic not quoted in the lead - why not include it too?
 * I would add "playoffs" to this sentence to make it clearer Saunders is the only head coach to have been to the playoffs with the Timberwolves, with a [playoffs] record of 47 games and 17 wins.
 * Done all. Thanks for the suggestion, but articles are too big for me to peer review, and I, to be honest, am very lazy (as some can tell...) --  SRE.K.A.L. &#124; L.A.K.ERS ]]  03:59, 30 May 2009 (UTC)