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List of Old Malvernians
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it may be a potential  candidate for featured list. Specific areas to discuss and make suggestions on  improvement are:
 * Layout - current  form  or table
 * Lack of images and whether this in itself is a setback
 * Quality of references
 * Citations per MoS

Thanks, Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 04:18, 2 October 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Sorry the PR has taken so long. While this is a good start, it has some serious issues requiring lots of work before it would be anywhere near ready for FLC. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
 * A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are many lists of alumni which are FLs at FL. A few examples that may be useful models are List of Washington & Jefferson College alumni and List of United States Naval Academy alumni
 * To answer your specific questions above, the FLs I checked were all in table form, though the way they were organized varied. I think this has to be a table.
 * The FLs I checked also were not completely illustrated, so that should not be a problem. They all had some images along side the tables and a striking lead image (which this currently lacks). If nothing else an image of the college itself could be used (not FAIR USE though)
 * I think the lack of references is the biggest probelm facing this list (though there are many others). COunting only A, B, and C, I got 28 Malvernians, only 12 of which had references. For FL, this will need to have atl east one ref for each person / entry, and perhaps more than one ref for some entries.
 * My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph (or here entry) needs a ref. If there is a brief biography of a person (which most FLs of alumni seem to have), then some facts from these bios may need additional refs.
 * Current refs do not always provide enough information per WP:CITE - current ref 23 is just Profile the peerage.com. For example, internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful.
 * The refs that are there need to be to reliable sources - what makes www.noblesseetroyautes.com or thepeerage.com a RS?
 * One dead external link per the tool on this PR page here
 * The lead does not really follow the MOS. FLs no longer start with "this is a list of..." for one thing.
 * There is great inconsistency in the material given. Some people have birth and death years, but not all do (and of course living persons would only have birth years). Most models have the year the person graduated (their "class year") as a column
 * Inclusion criteria are unclear - there are some people listed who do not have WP articles (red or no links) - do they meet [[WP:NN}}?
 * Article uses & where and should be used
 * Some blurbs are very brief, others quite long - they should probably be of a more uniform length.
 * Are there things unique to Malvern that should be included here? Which house the person was in as a student, for example?
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)
 * I think this gives you an idea where to start improving - good luck and thanks for your work on this article.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:40, 26 October 2011 (UTC)