Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Olympic medalists in equestrian/archive1

List of Olympic medalists in equestrian
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to Featured List status. I've never worked seriously on a list before, and never taken one through FLC, so comments geared towards that process in particular would be much appreciated.

Thanks, Dana boomer (talk) 02:38, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: This list looks well-done to me, a reader who knows next to nothing about these events. I have just a few minor suggestions having to do with issues related to prose or style.

Lead
 * "Competitors in the modern pentathalon event also have to complete an equestrian show jumping course... " - I'd be inclined to add a hyphen to "show jumping"; i.e, "show-jumping course".
 * "while the youngest was 16 year old Luiza Almeida of Brazil" - Hyphens here too: "16-year-old Luiza Almeida".

Heads and subheads
 * Lowercase "p" in "program" in the "Current Program" section head?
 * Lowercase "i" in the subhead "Dressage, Individual"?
 * Lowercase "t" in the subhead "Dressage, Team"?
 * Lowercase "i" in the subhead "Eventing, Individual"?
 * Lowercase "t" in the subhead "Eventing, Team"?
 * Lowercase "i" in the subhead "Show jumping, Individual"?
 * Lowercase "t" in the subhead "Show jumping, Team"?
 * Lowercase "e" in the section head "Discontinued Events"?
 * Ditto for the other heads and subheads below these that use capital letters on any word except the first word?

References
 * "pp. 24-25" in citation 2 needs an en dash rather than a hyphen in the page range. Ditto for pp. 14-15 in citation 5.
 * The date formatting (August 7, 2008) in citation 8 is out of sync with the date formatting elsewhere in the references.
 * Citation 10 has a typo: "The IOC medal database showns two more team members... ". This should be "shows". Also, I'd recommend a semicolon rather than a comma before "however".

General
 * MOS:BOLD strongly advises against double bolding. Several heads or subheads in the article are double-bolded because parts are wikilinked; the linking doubles the bolding of the automatically bolded head or subhead. Since the linked parts are already linked in the lead, I don't think it's necessary to link them again. Unlinking would solve the double-bolding problem. "Dressage, individual" is an example of what I'm alluding to.

I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 04:42, 2 November 2009 (UTC)
 * Finetooth, thank you very much for your comments. I think I have taken care of all of the issues listed above. If you have any further comments or suggestions, please let me know. Dana boomer (talk) 18:26, 2 November 2009 (UTC)