Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Pakistan Twenty20 International cricketers/archive1

List of Pakistan Twenty20 International cricketers
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to a FL status…

Thanks, ZiaKhan 16:19, 12 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Hello, Saharu4u. I've noted some very minor problems with this article. If these problems are cleared, it will definitely be reaching to a FL status. I find a slight problem with the references, and referencing style. Reference no. 4 is a redirect and changes it's domain. If you can do so, please change the reference into another source. And some references does not have accessdate, (sorry the tool isn't giving which reference it is)so please add it. Other than that I don't see any problem, and others are welcome to participate in this. Dipankan  ( Have a chat? ) 03:47, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Removed reference no. 4 as the list doesn't need this and fixed the rest. Thanks. ZiaKhan 20:00, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

Looking at the table there are a few things that have drawn my attention:
 * Comments from  Harrias  talk
 * Viewed on even a reasonably large monitor the table display is visually unattractive due to the large number of columns. It might be worth removing some of these: for example, "Maidens" isn't seen on most similar lists, nor the number of runs conceded. As only one player has taken a five wicket haul, that also seems surplus, as his achievement is highlighted when sorting by best bowling performance.
 * Removed three columns from the list.
 * Abdul Razzaq's maidens sort incorrectly (clearly not an issue if the column is removed however).
 * Column removed.
 * Khalid Latif's batting average sorts incorrectly.
 * Fixed.
 * What does "Ties as half a win" mean and who decided that?
 * I've put this according to ESPNcricinfo.
 * Why do references #6 and #71 use italics when none of the others do?
 * Fixed.
 * As the T20I caps is listed as a reference (#5) it shouldn't also be listed as an External link.
 * Removed the section.
 * "Inzamam-ul-Haq served Pakistan's first captain in T20Is." – Is grammatically incorrect. Also, some of the images flow from the name into a sentence, while some others then start a sentence in the caption.
 * I tried a little. Please have a look now.
 * "Forty-six players have played in fifty-three matches since their first match in 2006." the table shows that Shahid Afridi has made the most appearances with 50: so clearly 46 players can't have played 53 matches.
 * Replaced "Forty-six" players with "Pakistan cricket team"
 * "The Pakistan cricket team played its first T20I match under the captaincy of Inzamam-ul-Haq at County Cricket Ground, Bristol.." – This is lazy language: it allows the possibility that Pakistan played matches before this one with a different captain.
 * Removed "under the captaincy of Inzamam-ul-Haq".
 * "Pakistan is the most successful T20I team, having played 53 T20I matches with 32 wins, and a tie against India." Firstly, this places excessive importance on the tie, and secondly it doesn't define success. Pakistan has won one World Twenty20 tournament, the same number as England and India, so by that marker, all three as equally as successful: I assume you mean that in terms of wins, or a winning percentage they are the most successful. This needs to be made clear.
 * Added "In terms of wins".
 * "Mohammad Hafeez is the recently announced new T20I captain of the team." – This will quickly become very dated: if you are going to include something of this sort at all, limit it to something like "Mohammad Hafeez is the current team captain for T20Is."
 * Done.
 * "dismissing 58 batsmen over 50 matches." – But earlier in the sentence it says he's only played 48 matches? Being able to keep a rapidly changing list such as these up-to-date is a criterium for FL.
 * Updated.
 * The end of the third paragraph reads like a string of bullet points tacked together; try to vary the style and make it flow better.  Harrias  talk 13:24, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Tried to change. take a look now! Please keep me guiding. Thank you. ZiaKhan 20:00, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments –
 * I see both "their" and "its" in reference to the team. Is it a singular or plural item? I've seen both usages, but it should be consistent either way.
 * Pakistan having played 55 matches is repeated in the second paragraph when it is already stated in the first. Perhaps try changing the second usage to fix it.
 * "Misbah-ul-Haq score of 87 not out". Put 's at the end of his name.
 * The photo gallery above the table isn't that useful, and I suggest that it be removed.
 * Sorting in the T201 captains table could use some work. I know that having rowspans interferes with sorting, so this is something you might want to consider changing.
 * ESPNcricinfo shouldn't be italicized in any of the references. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:18, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * All fixed. Please take a look now. ZiaKhan 05:06, 15 June 2012 (UTC)